Great stuff. I really love the dynamics between Duncan and the various women that react to his size. The way Ada was being shy about him and inadvertently torturing him was the best combination of hot and cute. The descriptions of the mouth play was incredibly sexy, and the reunion of Callie and Duncan was heartwarming. Really looking forward to more of this.

While this was hot, I'm sort of surprised that Monica landed on this punishment of Kristie and even more surprised that Duncan could tolerate watching it unfold. If Duncan told Monica 'no' in that moment my sense of their relationship was that she would accept it, or even if he said that he didn't want or need this. I think I was missing a dark side of Duncan until now.


Author's Response:

I can see where you're coming from here, and honestly, I was expecting more reviews like this or even some outright pushback.

First, though, I'm glad you found it hot at least! That's always fun!

But yeah, this was a bit dark even for Monica. She kind of decided the punishment in anger without thinking it through, which is why she was starting to backtrack shortly before she did it. She saw her own doubt written on Duncan and Callie's faces, assuming they were judging her because she was judging herself. If Kristie hadn't have said what she said to Duncan, Monica wasn't going to actually do it. It was another rare rash decision made because, now that she finally has people she can think of as friends, it turns out they're kind of an emotional weakness for her. We'll have to see how she feels about this later, when she's back to her more rational self.

And you're absolutely right when you say that Monica would have stopped if Duncan said so. Well, maybe not towards the very end. I do think there's a "point of no return" in which Monica was going to ride out that orgasm no matter what.

As for Duncan, I think this was the bigger issue here, and you nailed the core of it when you used the word tolerate. Seeing someone else go through what he did could easily make him relive his trauma, although I don't think that's a given. But I do think there is a big factor here that makes this different from his experience with Kristie: He was told that Kristie consented to this and she not only didn't deny this when she had the chance but instead decided to mock Duncan for making such a big deal out of the whole thing and in the most vulgar way she could think of. I do think that if Monica just said, "She did this to you, so I'm doing it to her" and Kristie was begging her not to, Duncan would have stepped in.

As for Duncan's dark side, I do think that the fact that Kristie, the one person that he trusted at the time, did such a terrible thing to him did darken his soul a little. His rape has kind of been hanging over his head since chapter one, and it has a lot to do with his trust issues. I think that would leave anyone at least a little bit bitter.

I also think we all have a little darkness in each of us and that it's how we deal with it that defines us. Duncan buried it deep inside and it manifested in guilt, leading him to protect Kristie from any harsh treatment from his understandably upset friends. Also, the fact that this dark thought was the last part of that segment was my way of trying to show how much he was burying this feeling and how shitty he felt that it existed inside him. He feels bad that this is a part of him, like it makes him a bad person. But given Kristie's apparent willingness to go along with things and how sudden Monica acted, I was hoping it would come off as understandable that he would give in to it in this small way, choosing to act passive. He didn't ask for this, after all.

So there's my defense of my characters' actions. However, don't take that to mean that I view your points as any less valid. You made some great ones, and I appreciate the feedback! And even if a little more insight into where I was coming from doesn't sway you in the least, that's fine, too! I'm just glad to have the discussion.