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Omega: Inheritance by Jacksmith Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 179]
Summary:

A young woman, prosecuted for a crime she didn’t commit, is placed in the hands of her titanic best friend to learn a few lessons she didn’t earn but most certainly will never forget.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44494 Read Count: 127461
[Report This] Published: July 12 2014 Updated: October 24 2014
Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: July 12 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

It seems there's no due process, nor a chance for her to defend herself.  If an officer of the law came up to me like that, I'd be wondering WHAT I did too, since it seems like you need a law degree to live in today's world.  I always thought Omegas had some superhuman abilities besides their size.  You would think they would be able to avoid mistakes like this.  Unless the mistake is discovered, Alexandra is going to get the FULL treatment like Marion in the Consequences story, or worse.  She'll profess her innocence until she's broken, then she'd say anything to get the suffering to stop.  THAT'S probably when they'll discover their mistake.  I wonder what would happen then?  Can you sue an Omega?  This is well written, but like all your stories I'll proceed cautiously and hope things won't get as bad as I've said.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing. I'll hold off on confirming/denying any of your predictions since we're only a chapter in, but I like your thinking. And actually, despite the grim premise, there is going to be a decent amount of gentle-themed content in this story, so hopefully that'll help soften the blow of the more intense stuff.

Reviewer: riczar Signed starstarstarstar
Date: July 19 2014 Title: Chapter 2: Address

The system the Omegas are using seem a little messed up.  Their superiors seem to think its a good idea for their enforcers to participate in cases where they have personal stakes.  Claire's brother is assaulted, so she gets to punish the attackers.  Bridget's best friend is involved in an assault, so Bridget punishes her friend.  Conflict of interest?  Relationships destroyed, a chance that punishment might not equal the crime for good or bad.  No chance to defend yourself and face your accusers.  With this kind of system its a wonder why the Alphas tolerate it, and there not being more unrest.  I wonder if Kayla will eventually get involved if it becomes clear that an innocent was punished.  I was hoping the system was fair and equitable for all, but it appears that Alphas may in fact be the oppressed people now.  I'm still little nervous about how this story will go, but its interesting enough to continue.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing. I'd say it's a fair reaction to question aspects of the justice system here, though there is a reason Bridget was allowed to handle her friend that'll be shown in a later chapter. I would suggest it's jumping the gun to say Alphas are oppressed here, but given how wrong this particular case seems to be going, I can see where that thought comes from.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: August 10 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

You have now explained how a friend got to be in charge of dispensing punishemnt.  I think something similar happened with Claire in the other story.  I'm still surprised that High Command doens't see it as a conflict of interest and allows this to happen.  This is going to become ammunition for the anti-Omega and Beta faction of Alphas.  At the very least if Alex is innocent, then they'll demand a review of how Alphas are arrested, convicted and punished.  Like, I don't know, a trial.  A chance to confront your accuser and defend yourself.  The evidence as of now appears damning, but if a team of Alpha experts and lawyers had been allowed to investigate, they might have discovered the truth and saved Alex from the torture she's enduing.



Author's Response:

In this case, High Command just asked that Hart select an enforcer; it may have been a conflict of interest, though like in the case of Claire in Consequences, Bridget is considered safe enough and in control of the situation to handle it. As for Alphas demanding reviews of the justice system, I'd be very surprised if there aren't already groups doing that. Remember, this is a dystopian narrative; the Omega's justice system is by no means being defended by the story as perfect here.  It just is what it is.  Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: October 08 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Disorientation

I hope there's an adequate process for forgiveness.  Not instantly.  Emotional healing takes time.  Everyone that should have stood by her were Omegas and believed in their system and her guilt.  The Omega and Beta haters are going to have a field day if this goes public.  I can't wait to see how you're going to conclude this!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! There will definitely not be instant forgiveness, and that's all I'll say for now. You're right that Omega and Beta haters will not be taking it well; that's something that will definitely be addressed eventually.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: October 12 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Surrender

Wow.  Talk about twisting the knife.  The guilt is going to be overwhelming for Bridget.   Do Omegas even have procedures for punishing Betas that harm Alphas?  I know it sounds ludicrous, but it seems the entire system is designed to punish Alphas, which is why you're getting Betas that are bold enough to frame Alphas.  Again I say, for Alphas that are anti-Omega and/or anti-Beta, this is a public relations dream.   I look forward to your conclusion.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Omegas don't put Betas through sessions for hurting Alphas as they do when it's the other way around, since the sessions are meant to simulate the actions Alphas put Betas through (something Betas can't actually do back to them), but there are still definite consequences for what Nathaniel did. I know it can look like it's designed to get Alphas, though it really just looks that way because Alphas, far and away, are the ones committing the most crime.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: October 24 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Apart

This series continues to keep me interested.  I'm not sure what I expected from Kayla.  I just assumed someone of her power could offer so much more then a mind wipe or a limitless debit card.  Maybe something fantastic, like an offer to become an Omega?  Now before anyone says that Kayla doesn't choose the Omegas, let us remember that Claire's mom was selected by Kayla and wouldn't have achieved that status otherwise.  I anticipate that with Alma's release that Lexi is in for some more tough times.



Author's Response:

Interesting point. Ackbar basically answered this one for me in an above comment, since this was more of an observation about the whole series you made. Thanks for reading!

. by GTS33 Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 31]
Summary:

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Categories: Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Adult 30-39, Giantess, Body Exploration, Gentle, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 23 Read Count: 294708
[Report This] Published: July 15 2014 Updated: March 13 2015
Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: September 07 2014 Title: Chapter 1: 1

Please continue!

Time-Out 6: Power Play by Jacksmith Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 244]
Summary:

Scott Stevens, shrunken and incarcerated in his own home, faces dire consequences for his crimes in the hands (and shoes) of his giant family and acquaintances.  All the while, his mother Judy is hard at work on her senatorial campaign, and as usual has some conniving tricks in store.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Middle Age (50+), Couples , Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Giant, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Maternal, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Time-Out
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 70647 Read Count: 348255
[Report This] Published: July 15 2014 Updated: February 15 2015
Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: July 15 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

11 months before he MIGHT get parole.  Ouch.  No visiting friends?  I thought you implied in the comments that his girlfriend would make an appearance at some point.  With the treatment he's getting, I'm suprised he doesn't have any serious injuries.  Good writing as always.



Author's Response: His girlfriend will be showing up later on in the story. It's a good point you make about potential injuries; the best explanation I have is that Maggie's spent enough of her life being able to have Scott in her shoe that she can do it without permanently hurting him now.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: July 31 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Safety First

Sigh, apparently the PMRD must significantly increase your durability.  He should be bruised at the very least, if not have broken bones.  What I 'm waiting to see is him get truly hurt and see how his family reacts.  If the family shrugs it off, I'd probably kill myself, as it proves how they really feel.  That's what ticks me off the most about this family.  They don't seem to have a limit to how badly they will treat him.  I assume the time outside his house is supposed to be a break for him, but the treatment is worse.  Well I hope the story lightens up a little at some point.



Author's Response:

There is a bit of suspension of disbelief needed on the wearing-in-the-shoe-without-broken-bones thing, but what can I say, it's a giantess story.  I will note that part of what makes Maggie so confident in what she does to him is that she's never done anything that yielded consequences like a real lasting injury, so such a thing might force her to at least look at her actions if it happened. The story will soften up a bit after this opening.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: August 20 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

That was . . . confusing and a huge departure from her usual treatment of Scott.  It actually seems like she . . . cares.  I don't know if this is momentary lapse of hers, or she's a schizo.  The only conclusion I can come up with is that Scott's been behaving himself, acting in a manner that she thinks he should, and even "affectionately".  He's being rewarded with being treated almost human.  I remain cautious as things can always flip in an instant.  I was kind of hoping that Scott could have some quality time with Maggie's friend.  I get the warm fuzzies everytime a little guy is treated nicely and affectionately.



Author's Response:

Scott's equally confused.  All I'll say is that there's a reason for every action Judy takes; she's pretty calculating, and almost always has some kind of agenda.  And Scott will get some warm-fuzzy time with Maggie's friend later on in the story.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: August 31 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

As as Maggie is concerned, was Scott so bad to her to warrant that treatment?  I'm thinking back to another of your stories where a brother is shrunk and the sister treats him badly for years, but turns out that she had some form of misplaced affection for him, declaring that he belonged to her.

With Judy, you're screwing with my mind now.  All other instances we've seen of Judy, she's been mentally and physically abusing her son.  Not out of any apparent malice, but she seems to derive some pleasure from his abuse.  In this chapter, she's all mommy sweetness now.  Acting as a mother should.  To protect and comfort her son.

I have a feeling things will go back to normal tomorrow.  I wish that it wouldn't.  Its moments like this chapter that I like best.



Author's Response:

I'm hesitant to give too much away about Maggie. I will say she does have better reason than Carly to do what she does, though there are still several underlying factors that have damaged her to the point that she's willing to treat him like that.

Judy is acting all mommy-sweetness for a particular reason, though it won't last forever.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: October 28 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Mommy's Maw

Does she truly want her son to become a strong and indepedant man?  All these humilating experiences is turning him into a scared nervous wreck.  Its going to take years of therapy to make him anywhere near a normal functioning person.  The first thing he should do if and when he's released is take the next bus out of town and not look back.  Divorce himself from his disfunctional family.  I place this story in the category of "I can't watch anymore of this, but its too complelling to put down".  The author must be doing something right, but it feels so wrong at the same time.



Author's Response:

It's a good question you're asking. All I'll say is that Judy may not want her son to turn out quite as independent as she sometimes tells him. Glad to hear you're having difficulty looking at this story directly!

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: November 08 2014 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Callback

It might be difficult to do at his size, but he needs to confront his mother about Ella.  That he's noticed via caller ID that she's been calling.  That he overheard Maggie talking to her and he gets the idea that his relationship is in REAL trouble.  And how important that relationship is to him.  Its probably the only thing he really has to look forward to at the end of his sentence.  He's been pretty close to rock bottom before, but he always seems to find a way to rally himself.  A breakup could be the final straw for him.



Author's Response:

You're right that Scott probably ought to be weighing his options. Part of why he's doing this is that Maggie, at least, can more or less be predicted in her patterns, mean as they are. Judy's recent behavior has unnerved him enough that, at least for now, it's a less attractive possibility than making a deal with his sister.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: December 06 2014 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Looking Up

In this chapter, Maggie said something that was very interesting.  She resisted making Scott bigger then 4 inches because she didn't like seeing him like this; where she can make stuff out.  I think it means, somewhere in that messed up mind of hers, I think Maggie does care.  She keeps Scott as small as possible so its easier to avoid thinking that he's a human being and her older brother. 

I still don't know why he's relying on Maggie to get into contact with Ella.  I'm sure he could reason with his mother to let him talk to her, considering how troubled the relationship is, and she appeared to like Ella in an earlier story.

At some point I hope to know what Judy is thinking of.  What her long term plan is for her family.  Does she really want Scott rehabilitated and a contributing member of society, or is she hoping to keeping him under her control forever?  This and his previous punishments is really turning him into a mental case.



Author's Response:

Good thinking there about Maggie's view of Scott. It helps her treat him the way she does if she views him as less of a person.

You're right that it might be worth a try to ask Judy. Scott's perceptions of what's possible are just kind of warped at this point.

By the end of the story, there will definitely be some clarity on what Judy truly wants for her family.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: January 01 2015 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: The Party

Wow.  The hammer falls.  I wonder what standards she'll propose using for this new underclass of shrinkees?  Who shrinks and who stays big?  What rights, if any would an unincarcerated shrinkee have?  Will they be virtual slaves like Scott?  Its a slippery slope that any citizen could fall under.  If this the future Judy wants for her son, who's crime was really the result of poor judgement then criminal intent?  I wonder if Judy knows how much of a mind fuck she's putting on Scott?  I have yet to see an honest discussion between mother and son, where Scott can vent how really feels to Judy without fear of reprisal.  Still reading.  I guess the reason I can stick with this story, is because its not overally mean and violent, just suspenseful.



Author's Response:

Hehe. I'll stay silent on the specifics of Judy's proposal until a later until time, but she (and Techilogic) are thinking ambitiously about it. The final chapters will include a conversation between Judy and Scott about all of this. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: January 25 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

I think for Maggie, its fun only when its temporary.  I think at the end of the day she wants her BIG brother back.  Kyle probably understands the implications and the "slippery slope" that I indicated in my last comment.  Today in the USA, just about everyone breaks a law at least once a day and never knows it, because the law has become so complicated.  A bit disappointed that there were no explanations in this chapter, and no Ella yet.  I can't believe Nancy went ahead with the sexual play despite the condition Scott is in.

Still anxious to see what life will look like for a non-incarcerated shrinkee.  Meaning once its determined that Scott has served his time, but remains shrunk, will his treatment remain the same (i.e. slave/pet status)?  What kind of rights will he have?  What kind of life does he have to look forward to?  If Ella wanted to make up with him, could they marry, have kids, could he get a job?  Would Judy even allow him out of her "protection"?



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing. There will be more about Judy's plans in the final couple of chapters, and Ella will be appearing a few posts from now. One thing to keep in mind is that although Judy is making a definitive statement of her vision of the justice system, it's by no means being put in place yet - she still has obstacles to bypass. In theory, the permanently shrunken people would still retain their rights, albeit with their safety at the discretion of their guardian. Scott could also, in theory, marry and have kids, but Judy is clearly not one to let what's hers go very easily.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: January 30 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

Ok, anyway you look at it, this was rape.  Is there no one to stand up for poor Scott?  Instinctively I want to say his mother, but she seems to be too focused on her political ambitions and never really listens to Scott.  I'm still waiting for Scott to finally break in a way that not even his mother can ignore.  I can easily see that if things don't go well with his meeting with Ella, that with all hope lost, that he might start making some attempts on his life.



Author's Response:

It's a good point you raise that Scott is almost out of reasons to go on here, and it will definitely be addressed as we reach the final chapters. Rest assured there will be a good reason for Scott to still be around in the seventh story of this series, and thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: February 07 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

Non-canon?  Damn!  I liked how Ella seemed to enjoy holding tiny Scott.  It gave me hope that they might share some intimate moments like that in the future.  Plus Judy seemed to like Ella in the first story.  I was hoping that if Judy's laws passed that she might be willing to let Scott go into her custody.  A nice chapter!  Some more with Scott and Ella next chapter?  Hopefully Judy won't walk in on them.  He'd probably never be able to see or talk to Ella again if that happened.



Author's Response:

I realize I was pretty vague in that end note; even though the 1st one is non-canon, constants include Judy likes Ella, and Ella enjoys holding Scott at his smaller size. Unfortunately this chapter is Ella's only appearance in the story, but she will be in the next one.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: February 08 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: MVP

JimBob, I'm trying to take the point of view of a parent.  There's a lot of time and resource investment raising a child to become an adult that contributes to society.  The wish for every parent is for the happiness of their children.  As messed up as Judy is, I have trouble believing that she wishes a life of slavery on her son. Another hope for parents is for grandchildren.  Now maybe she has some kind of plan for Scott that differs from his current treatment.and provides him with some opportunities to achieve some of the above, albeit under her supervision.



Author's Response:

You're right that Judy doesn't want her son enslaved, as we'll see in the final couple of chapters. However, that's not to say she won't disregard a lot of what Scott wants in favor of what she sees as the greater good.

Reviewer: riczar Signed
Date: February 11 2015 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: For the Good

So that's it?  It sounds like its going to be more of the same treatment for the rest of his life.  No forgiveness, no redemption.  Why'd she even bother hearing anything Scott had to say?  It doesn't change anything.  The whole Nancy thing proves my point.  She should be on her way to a jail cell, but because Scott is a shrinkee, he doesn't matter.  Judy makes all these claims that she loves him, but I imagine its not as a son, but a favored toy or pet.  A normal parent would be enraged by someone raping their child, but she's just going to tell her not to do it again.  And Scott's not asking enough of the right questions, or is being too general.  He should be asking for specific examples of what Judy envisions his life to be.  Many of these questions I've asked in previous comments.  Is he going to be her foot slave, or is going to be able to find a real job?  What about relationships, sex, marriage?  He won't have any possessions either, since everything is built for normal sized people.  I would go crazy without a computer and a TV.  Judy isn't there supervising him all the time and others have taken advantage of Scott during these absences.



Author's Response:

For Judy, this conversation is less about actually turning Scott to her side right now and more about at least making him aware of the full stakes, as well as what she sees as his easiest option now. She certainly does have other interests impeding her role as a good parent. The questions Scott should be asking will arise in time; for now, he's just trying to wrap his head around what Judy's done to him and is still in the process of trying to do. It won't be addressed in this story, but Judy's plan doesn't necessarily involve enslaving Scott for the rest of his life - his purpose for her is mainly in the here and now during her campaign, as well as her association with Techilogic.

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