Different entertwining stories from a world much like our own yet incredibly different.
I have a feeling things are going to hit the fan at Tyler's party and/or the upcoming wedding. I too see that these stories just might be converging. A very good chapter. Keep it up!
Quiet!...You're giving the plot away.
Alan, a recent college graduate, returns to his alma mater the next fall as a tutor for a friend of his named Sadie, who shrinks and enslaves him.
Eight years later, he tells his story through Charlotte MacBride, a police officer, and an old high school friend.
Ok, I've finally caught up by reading all your previous works set in this world. The questions I have come from the entire body of word set in this world. I'm the kind of person who likes to understand the nuts and bolts of a fictional world to better immerse myself into the story. I'd like to know what the rules are for this society and what benefits shrinking men brought it. The confusion really comes regarding your new character, Alan. If his immunity had expired, what made him think he could get a job and live a somewhat normal life? I get the impression that not all men are slaves. But how is that determined? This story so far is a good addition to the series and I look forward to future chapters.
Great questions. And lucky for me I have answers for them.
I'm also a nuts-and-bolts person, not so much because with that visible structure I can have the pleasure of getting myself lost exploring a strange world, while knowing at the same time that the maze has an ending, a way out (partly because real life doesn't have this) -- but because with this structure and context behind me I find myself free to build more intricate stories, more complex characters, get them lost in rapids for a while, knowing there's a way out for them, and set them off in relief against old stories & characters, society, etc.
1) Getting to Alan, I didn't feel the need to spell out everything for the reader, but sort of hoped the general impression I left would lead to him/her to a few important inferences. We know his mother was a Society leader. We also know that he didn't seek her protection or special aid when he went out to find work on his own. Meaning, for some reason, he doesn't want to, perhaps actively avoiding, implicating himself in the Society. For some reason, he doesn't want to become a member, a henchman, say. But he's not the sort of rebel, like Abigail in my other story, who has ethical, social, political reasons for rebelling (the Daisy Millerite rebels, whom Society in general actively seeks out and opposes, crushes, when they become dangerous). He has private reasons: his hatred for the Society began with his hatred for his mother (he doesn't call her before Sadie shrinks him, because if she saves him, gives him 'immunity' and a job, he'd owe her something). So the questions to ask about Alan are, I think: 1) Why doesn't he call on his mother to give him a job? and, because he's not a rebel in his blood, but because of private circumstances, 2) How will he eventually be assimilated into the structure of Society?
2) The question about benefits doesn't concern most of the characters in this story, and it doesn't directly affect the background (though it might deepen it) so I won't bring it up here. The answer to that will come out in Chloe, when I show some of the higher-echelon personnel. If I spent more time with Pearl, in Adela, you would have already known it. I need the right time and the right people to answer that in the story.
Thanks for reading. As far the stories go: a story like Chloe is where you'll find most of your "bare-bones" questions answered. In Sadie, I wanted to start afresh, and maybe draw in new readers, who didn't want to spend time reading the other three stories. In Holly, I wanted to dim the lights somewhat (but I stopped that story a month ago because I was unhappy where it was going -- I felt I was going over the same territory in Adela -- with slave-selling revelations and so on -- but in a watered-down way. I might rewrite the last three chapters).
I'm not really into feet myself. I guess that's why I've always had trouble with the Holly's Library series. I initially avoided this series, but I gave it chance in "Adela". I guess I picked out something that fits my preference for gentle giantess stories. That's why I believed Holly when she told the male protanist about the nice future in the New World that she and her friends were building. I guess I stupidly assumed that future would benefit everybody. The shrinking, a method to weed out the evil and corrupt people of society and men having to earn their right to stand tall. Instead, all I've seen is complete slavery, mainly foot slaves. Men actually being bred for foot servitude, eaten, crushed and other nasty things, wasn't what I was looking for in this series.
Also, it seems to make little sense for Alan to have been shrunk and subjugated with there being relatively inexpensive and specially bred slaves available. Initially I thought it was because Sadie wanted to own and possesss him specifically. But now I'm not so sure, as it appears that he's being passed around to different women, and Sadie doesn't seem to care. Could it just be that Sadie didn't like that there was a lowly MAN running around free?
Charlotte seems to be the first breath of fresh air since Adela in her self titled story. Someone who actually cares about a man! It seems that these 2 women are more in line with what I was hoping from this series. That perhaps all the other women have gotten corrupt on their own power and have forgotten the reason for the revolution in the first place?
Maybe my assumptions were wrong. But those were the impressions I got. Maybe the author can enlighten me?
Haven't heard from you in a while, riczar. Thanks for this.
Nothing to answer here, except in the second paragraph. You want to know about the black market, and the difference between legal slaves (the genetically altered ones in the shopwindow in the chapter 'intermission' here), and the illegal ones (everyone else). How large a segment of the shrunken population, in this alternate universe, is legally/illegally captive or enslaved, etc. And what are they like. Why are the legal slaves cheap, and why was someone like Charlotte, your 'breath of fresh air' (she is great though) repulsed by the 'legal' ones in particular? Why did she say she wanted Alan instead?
But if you're really interested in discussing the whole illegal market outside the story (what's happening in Chloe vs. what's happening here, in a sorority house), why Alan was abducted or what some people like Sadie or Olivia do in college (vs. what someone like Chloe does for a career), that'd be interesting.
As for everyone else here, you're going to get a high intensity, filthy mix of gentle violence and violent gentleness. What you've seen is what you've seen. If you're going to complain about a lack of 'breath of fresh air' gentleness or equality among the men and women here, I'll just ignore you. I don't care why you or anyone else avoids things or what you avoid -- I only care if you're into it. Love it if we both are.
The story of After Shrink High continues. Hope seems to have been all but lost with the ending of Act 1.
But there are still those who fight the Society's corruption. Outside Atlanta, men and women struggle to survive in the new shrunken world all while fighting against the titanic giantesses of the Society. The shrunken world is a harsh place, but such a cruel world may just temper the only hope of stopping the Society.
Act 2 assumes you have read Act 1 so make sure to read it first.
After all this time the weight and impact of your chapter 1 ending still hangs over this story. I guess it still bothers me that Isabella was killed and Sanders was betrayed by Aviel, whom was empowered with gigantic size for her betrayal. That any future encounter will be with them on opposite sides. Even though they were pretty well matched when they served on the same squad, Aviel demonstrated pretty well on Sanders the power she now had and how very little chance he had of of striking back at her.
These are things that were probably going through Sanders' mind as he struggled in your latest chapter. But it looks like you've thrown him a bone, a chance to begin to help turn the tables on the Society. And who knows, maybe even have Sanders and Aviel reconcile their friendship at distant point in the story. Keep up the good work!
Grrrr! I thought we were headed for an interesting moment between Sanders and Lutice's boobs. This being a prank, I suppose it could still happen. Looking forward to the REAL next chapter.
Looks like the Society uses mind control to keep some of their people in line. Too bad Sanders couldn't get his hands on a Shrink Gun, and further that Lutice had to turn hers in. That means no more "safe" sex if Sanders had stayed. I think the Resistance should now focus on disabling those mind control devices. If they can get a few giant women on their side, they might have a chance. Good chapter!
That would be helpful. Lets hope its that and not just that Lutice was nutty all along.
Great chapter! Nice way to slip Aviel back in. In the interest of wanting to see more giantess interaction maybe someday down the line, the Resistance can get its hands on a shrink ray. Assuming (hopefully) it only works on women, it'd be nice to see characters like Samantha giant sized. Maybe a tactic (eventually), infiltrate a Society facility shrunk, grow, do lots of damage and shrink for the escape. Wishful thinking I suppose, but I think a variation of that could be possible in the distance future. Rating of 10!
Thanks. I suppose I can let slip that we will see giantess Resistance at some point, but that is all I am going to say on that. How it happens and such I will leave to your imaginiation.
This is the story of how family man John is accidently shrunk at work and must survive at home with his spolit wife and her bratty daughter. Join him as he fights for survival in his own home against his own family.
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This could be an interesting story, but the fatal ending is kind of turning me off. I suppose there are alot of folks here that are into that kind of thing. I might consider continuing to read this if chapter one was just a tease and there's a nonfatal ending coming at the actual end of the story.
Angered by his girlfriend's slovenly ways and stinking feet, James decides to create a list of house rules. Abbey doesn't take this particularly well and decides its time for James to get a little perspective
I have this feeling that he's not going to be turned back at the end of the week. Either he'll be too used to it or she'll enjoy it too much. All I care about really is that she still loves him and he's her one and only. Some stories bother me when the woman goes on with her life and has other relationships while the transformed man suffers. But the story's interesting. I look forward to more.
Nazi Germany finds a way to attack the "untouchable" United States. Will this plan change history?
Meh. Ending feels rushed. Not too happy about the outcome either way. Was a good set up and plot, but the execution could have been better.
I know. I was wanted to get this one out from under me. I might do a redone ending someday.
A loving father of one inexplicably starts shrinking. Unfortunately for him, his daughter soon realizes that she doesn’t have to take orders from him anymore – and their relationship starts to take an entirely different turn …
The fact that she isn't getting medical help for her father tells me that maybe she knows why he's shrinking and regressing to childhood. Since the father isn't working, how will they survive when the savings runs out? She's either gone insane and not thinking of these things, or she's worked out some way to keep the money coming in. I look forward to someday knowing what the real story is with the daughter. As usual, the story is well written, but a bit darker then I'd like. I look forward to reading more!
Eh, things will work themselves out sooner or later ... hopefully you don't find the lack of resolution too distracting so far; I pretty much wanted to stretch out this part of the story as much as possible while I could, so some of these plot things take a while to progress.
Thanks for reading :).
The fact that she isn't getting medical help for her father tells me that maybe she knows why he's shrinking and regressing to childhood. Since the father isn't working, how will they survive when the savings runs out? She's either gone insane and not thinking of these things, or she's worked out some way to keep the money coming in. I look forward to someday knowing what the real story is with the daughter. As usual, the story is well written, but a bit darker then I'd like. I look forward to reading more!
Well if all hope is gone, then maybe its time to dare Kyra to do her worse and verify that she doesn't give a shit about you. That's been the hardest part to swallow in this story. Does she dislike him so badly to treat him this way. I'm now wondering if this story is going to be like your last one. The woman comes out practically unscathed (and improved) while the guy is completely ruined, if not dead. I'm going to cross my fingers and hope for some kind of turn around to end the torture. The story continues to be compelling and a good read, though not my cup of tea as far as the fetish goes ( I like nice).
I'll admit, I didn't put much thought when writing this story as to why Kyra would treat him this badly. Mostly just for her own amusement, I guess. But thanks for reading, anyway.
As you can tell reading all these comments I think you've just about reached people's limit for dramatic tension. We need to start seeing some kind of end game coming. Some insight into what Kyra is planning and why she's doing this to her own father. She's managed to take away everything from him and now finally his only friend. This is a well written story and I keep reading mainly to see what's going to happen next. Is this going to go the way of Pariah and he's going to have a bad end, or do you have something special in mind (hopefully something nice to compensate for all he's lost)?
Yeah, I'll admit this story could have been shorter but I kept getting carried away with scenes (Actually, the story might have turned out even longer if the constant height change hadn't kept things moving along!). There's not a whole lot left now, though, just a handful of chapters to go.
How much more can he take? I was hoping he would fall and sustain an injury that couldn't be glossed over. Maybe someone would show some genuine concern for him. It seems that no one cares about him anymore. All he has to look forward to is unending misery. All he gains from cooperating with them is not improved conditions, but a respite from worse treatment. He should just kill himself and get it over with. How much smalerl is he going to get? Will his youthening continue, or has that stopped and he's just getting smaller? Are we getting anywhere near the end? I'd really like to know what all his suffering is about. I've been asking the same question since chapter one with no clear answer. Why has Kyra done this to her loving father? Taken everything from him, even his friendships. She had the power to truly help him and denied it to him. She knows there's no reversal for his condition.
Despite some interesting plot points, this story continues to be more frustrating then anything else.
There's no real reason for Kyra to treat him like this, other than just because she can. To me, the unexplained unfairness of it is what makes it erotic, actually. That, and the dehumanizing aspect of how everyone is treating him. To each his own, I guess.
I will say that there's only a couple chapters left in the story, though.
The ending felt rushed and lacked any insight into the reasons why his daughter stole everything from him. Why on earth would a teenage girl want to saddle herself with a baby? Especially one that will never grow up? For what it is I suppose this is a good story, but not to my liking. I was hoping for a big reveal like in "Pariah". I wasn't too crazy about that ending either, but it made more sense then this one. I give this story a "meh".
Fair enough. I think I've covered my response in other reviews, so I won't repeat it here. But anyways, thanks for reading.
A Strong new drug is introduced into the populace,it's desired effects is to enhance the human immune system.The issue with it is it only works on people with the double x chromosome in their D.N.A.The results seemed to enhance everything about the female body including strength,sex drive,intelligence and aggresiveness.One other unintended side effect is the growth of the female body and as men come to find out that's not all.
Was this a one chapter short, or will there be more? If there's more, I'll be intrigued to see where you go with this.
Ashley's big sister decides to intervene in response to conduct she finds unacceptable from her smaller sibling, with some help from her friends.
A very good chapter and further insight into Claire's character and what methods she uses to rehabilitate her charges. I dread what Jenna has in store for her, since we now know her true character from the other story. I don't think there's any way to get around that the relationship between the sisters WILL be changed by this ordeal. It must be in order for the lesson to stick. And it must be in order to maintain any kind of realism. I think the chapter is fine the way it is. If you must post the alternate chapter, please wait to the story's conclusion to avoid confusion and maintain story flow.
Yeah, chapter's sticking in my pocket I believe.
And there will be a change in the relationship, but I won't vouch for the volume. There are certain things I know of that must change between them, and it's anyone's best guess as to whether or not it sticks as those things.
I have to agree with Kaz on this. Consequences is such a great story with great characters that it shouldn't JUST end. A couple of suggestions on how you should approach this. Finish Marion's first punishment. Establish the pattern of their punishments, then you can time skip, only doing highlights of the their year together or jump to the end with us using the before mentioned punishment patterns to imagine how the rest of the year went. At least let us see how the 3 girls ended up. You could also set this story aside for now and tell other stories, coming back to this one every so often when the muse strikes you. I think you have so many potential storylines that could spin off from this one, like you did with THIS story.
But KEEP WRITING! There are still many mysteries that you've tantalized us with to stop now.
I appreciate the thoughts and suggestions. I'll definitely consider them, and I like the general idea there. Thank you.
I can just imagine that Ashley is going to have trouble be around Omegas for a while. And even when she gets past that, she'll probably have some level of trauma. You're right. This will probably change their relationships forever. I look forward to more from this series.
Guess we'll...have to see! It will stick with her, though. Thanks for reading.