Hanna is turned into her best friend's morning coffee.
Great short story! I really enjoyed it. Good jerk at the end, too. BTW, I love Dunkin' Donuts coffee!
A plain, plump woman is reading on a city bus, and the narrator is studying her. Slowly he descends into a fantasy with her, imagining very intently what she must be like both as a normal-sized woman and his own personal giantess.
I'm surprised that you don't like this story. It's very methodical, descriptive and sensual. I enjoyed it. As I said about the "Christmas Party" story, I appreciate that you write normal and even bigger women into your stories. Not enough writers do. Keep up the good work.
I think I was dissatisfied with this story because it was just a moment in time that I built upon. Maybe that's all it has to be, just a study of a special woman.
I didn't realize there was an issue with the full range of body sizes. Maybe other people are thinking about supermodels in their stories? I want as much realism as I can introduce in my work, hopefully to enable a reader to better relate to the characters in it. I'll definitely start leaning on "plus sized" women (and men) as a counterstrike to the more narrowly defined margins of acceptable body types.
Amber is a witch who lives by herself in the woods. Like any good witch, she has many strange belongings, but among her many magical possesions, is a music box. The box holds a secret of its own,but it is is locked, and Amber cannot reach it's contents, at least not until a young man by the name of Jake comes along.
Not a bad start. I'm curious to see what happens next so I'll be looking for your next update. Keep up the good work!
Tanya had just moved into her own house after her parents kicked her out of home, after a day that she spent looking for a job, as usual, the last thing she expected to find at her house was a very small, unexpected guest.
Not a bad concept, but one thing you should consider is that writing in present tense is a challenging thing that few writers can pull off without frustrating the readers.
Not a bad concept, but I would suggest changing the verb tense to make it a little easier to read.
Good effort to use past tense, though you are still mixing in present tense as well. Ultimately it's your story, so write the way you feel most confident. It's a good sign that you can take recommendations and try to put them to use, so keep up the good work.
As for the story itself, it gets interesting. I'll continue to follow it and hope that you'll provide us with regular updates!
Short young man goes after a girl he had been friends with as a kid, who may not be all that she seems.
Good story. Elizabeth is pretty cruel. I'm not a big fan of transformation but I really enjoyed the build up.
The story of a woman and her tiniest admirer. Or slave. Or...boyfriend?
As is usually the case with your stories, this is very sensual and appealing to read. I have enjoyed it tremendously. I look forward to future chapters and finding out where this will go.
Please continue!
Thanks! I've been gone lately, but I'm back, hopefully. I've seen that you've been writing a lot, and hope to get to read some of it and tell you what I think. Thanks for your review!
Wow. Just wow. I am loving this story. Your writing is incredible and with every additional chapter you raise the bar to new heights. Even in Noelle's cruelty she is sensual and the writing stirs the imagination. Ryan is one lucky guy!
Once again, I appreciated your review and your rating! I'm trying to do something a little different than my normal work. But I'll agree, Ryan is very lucky!
I forgot to add a rating with my last post.
Magnificent chapter! Absolutely stunning. I cannot wait for the next part of this so I can see what happens to Ryan. I enjoy messy food scenes like this a lot. Very humiliating. Well done!
As is usually the case, your description of Ryan's plight is purely awesome. I enjoyed the way that he identified with his non-human companions inside Noelle's mouth. Very well-played.
Perhaps since Ryan's escape and subsequent sentencing to "bra duty" came at the very end of this chapter, the next chapter can be a sensual description of his predicament there.
I figure that in near-death situations, you do whatever you have to do to survive. Identifying them as being in a similar situation, but helpless, empowers the character so that he feels like he could possibly survive this, because he is NOT helpless, like they are. Plus, I just like the idea of lots of living, or non-living things being swallowed at the same time. I dunno, maybe it's weird kink. *shrug* Thanks for your review, as always!
I forgot to put a rating on my last review. I know you like your stars!
Yep, I do! Lol.
Ian sits down and connects to virtual reality to live out his giantess fantasies, but gets a little more than he expected.
The way this ended, you really could keep it going and expand on it. I encourage you to keep going on this one.
Bravo! Great work keeping the story going, B. This was a terrific add-on. I think you've got something good going here, keep at it!
A tiny man runs into some trouble while retrieving some food
Great story. It could really be the start of a great continuing story and if you choose to add to it, I know you'll generate a lot of interest from the readers here.
I hope you'll continue the story, B.
Bella becomes quite irate upon finding that her boyfriend would rather watch the game with his friends than go out on a date with her.
Welcome to GTS World! I'm glad to see that you are on here and writing stories, Beallis. And I see you've flooded the market on your first day it. I'm hoping to read and comment on all three of your stories.
This one was quite the little gem. As you know I'm a pretty avid sports fan, so I may have pulled a "Bret" once or twice in my life. Lucky for me I didn't end up getting eaten by my girlfriend and triggering a wave of vore and violence!
Good twist at the end, too. Good read all around!
Tim woke up shrunk. This is the story of his misadventure. First story. Feedback appreciated.
Hello, Veronica and welcome to Giantessworld! Your story has you off to a good start here! I think you'll find that most writers/readers here are eager to help and share ideas.
Regarding this story, the good points were that it moved very quickly because Tim never spent too much time with one person. It was fast paced and full of action, which I think a lot of readers here enjoy. The bad side to this was that it gave the story a rushed feeling. A very effective way to counter this is to divide the story into smaller chapters and release a new chapter every day or so. You'll probably generate a few loyal followers doing it that way, too!
Bottom line is that you are off to a good start and will no doubt only get better from here. I am looking forward to reading more of your work!
Zack is shrunken down the day of his soon to be wife,Sarah's 25th birthday,unfortunally for Zack,she dosen't know he's there!
It seems like you have a good start to a good concept. I agree with ArtimusG that you could police up your story to make it easier to read.
If I may add a few recommendations as well, I suggest that you take the time to describe your characters in greater detail. Sarah is a overweight, but is she just a few extra pounds or is she big girl? What color is her hair? Eyes? What about Zack? How old are these people?
All this information helps you set the scene. Show the reader, don't tell them. Artimus already touched on that.
Also, the flow of the story was rough. Try to keep conversations concentrated together, interspersed with descriptive text. The descriptions in between help alert the readers that the story has progressed from the kitchen to other rooms in the house, etc. It was extremely hard to follow as written.
You should take the time to check out the "writing tools" section. There are a lot of good ideas up there that apply to any writing, from writing on this site to writing your term paper for class!
Lastly, I see that this is your first story and that you've been a member here for almost a month. Let me just say "welcome" and encourage you to keep at it. A lot of the readers/writers here are eager to help each other out with ideas and writing tips. If you need help, just ask!
A teenager has been shrunk by his sadistic mother and he has to find a way to return to his normal height
I must say, in terms of spelling and grammar this is a vast improvement over your other story. The story itself is a good start as well. You are heading in the right direction.
BTW, why did you delete the other story?
i deleted the other story because it was only a test run just to see how people would respond really,just untill i was going to post this story. Also thanks for the complement on the storie so far i am going to be carefully reviewing my chapters before adding any other ones. PS: the first chapter on how he willl get shurnk may take some time as i not going to rush that part nor am i figured out what exactly is the best was of shrinking him.
A very good start. Seems like this one is going to be epic. I'll look for the regular updates.
Is "the land of the apples" Kazakhstan? The name of their largest city Almaty literally means "full of apples."
