Hey! It’s me again, I had another question. This time on the world of Magna Gratia. Since it takes place in the world of Gulliver. What happened to the Lilliputians miniature rivals the Blefuscudians? Did the brobs conquer their island too? Or has Blefuscu maintained its independence. If so, is there still bad blood between them and the Lilies?

Hey it me! The creep who berates you with

question about your story at 4 am. I decided to write a petty lengthy review of what I think about this wonderful piece of literature you’ve created. Giving some criticism, praise, and some hopes I have for the story. Forgive me if there are any typos. I started writing this at 3 in the morning cause of insomnia so although I can’t fall asleep, my brain still feels like mush.

First, the bad. 

Ok, this is a pretty hot take, I apologize if this critique sounds harsh, but Nick’s character appears somewhat lacking. He had the potential to vividly portray how individuals cope with trauma and the process of living with horrific experiences, which aligns with your intentions. However, you miss opportunities to delve into the nuances of his reactions to nightmarish situations. This oversight could be somewhat problematic and potentially insensitive. While it’s not a significant issue, it still exists. In media, these symptoms are often overlooked, and Magna Gratia seems to fall into that trap. For instance, in chapter 15, when Jeannie brings Nick into the bathroom, you state his emotions without truly showing them. Instead I believe It would be beneficial to elaborate on how he freezes up, how time seems to slow, and how he struggles to process his trauma, rather than just telling us. You could also explore the resurfacing memories of his tribe’s tragic fate. Even though he wasn’t in a joyful mood upon arriving at Jeannie’s place, adding more details could enhance his character. You could depict him having night terrors, tensing up at Jeannie’s powerful footsteps due to traumatic associations with his parents getting stomped , or experiencing various trauma responses like fight, flight, freeze, or fawn. Trauma doesn’t have a neat beginning, middle, and end; it’s more like a lightning strike, chaotic and disorganized. Often times when people try to recalling horrific events. They have a hard time organizing their thoughts. I’m critiquing Nick because the other characters feel realistic by comparison. Nick comes across as somewhat bland, except for the scene where Sarah causes his panic attack, which felt authentic. But maybe there was something I missed idk. 

I guess I’m kind of going after low hanging fruit sense this is a story about 6 mile high people so logic is kinda thrown out the window. But I understand that realism is important to you so I’ll give it anyways. Ain’t no way the soil on Lilliput is able to support the mega flora native to Brobdignag. Nor would it rain enough and if it did Lilliput would probably be underwater.

Another Logical issue I had with the story  Is that if Jeannie really cared about saving Lilliputians so much. Why doesn’t she just take them Lili controlled section of Lilliput? I mean I get that it might be expensive but couldn’t she just use Magna Gartia as like a terminal until she has the funds. I have no clue how big Lilliput is but, surly for someone as large as her it can’t be too far. I’m sure it’s just a train ride away. Maybe I’m underestimating the scale of Lilliput. But the solution just seems so obvious. Not only would they be much safer there but i imagine they would be a lot happier. As nice as Jeannie is, I would imagine that she is a constant reminder to them about how insignificant they are. They wouldn’t be reminded of this in Lilliput, at least not constantly. And I’d imagine it also provides the Lilies much more agency over their lives. This might also be “low hanging fruit” but it’s worth mentioning. 

On the topic of our oversized protagonist. I love Jeannie to death. But she can be such an airhead sometimes. One instance that comes to mind is when Nick confronts her about the Gigis incident. Her reasoning for not taking action is “because it wouldn’t have changed a thing. She would have done it sooner or later” forgive my crude language. But this is bullshit. Even if she was going to return and do it later, it would still have been better to save at least a few Lilliputians rather than just sitting around with her thumb up her ass. Even if Lilies where eventually going to die it’s best to at least put some effort in. And if she had, those Lillies that Sarah devoured would still be alive. Not only that, but she could have at least reported the Gigis to the authorities. Maybe by leaving an anonymous message. Again maybe I missed something but she didn’t even do that. 

This isn’t a complaint. But I originally was expecting the mode of production used in Magna Gratia to operate more communally. But I guess I was wrong. Now the Lilies get to experience the wonders of exploitation!

Anyways, that’s all I had to say when it came to criticism. Sorry for being such a Debby downer. The story isn’t bad by any means. Again it’s incredible, In fact that’s why I criticized it in the first place. Because of how much effort was put into it and how realistic it is. I’m sorry if the tone sounds a little rude. Now to the positives as well as some hopes I have for the story. 

The story’s good. In my opinion it’s one of the best on this site and it’s definitely the best when it comes to wholesome content. As stated in my hissy fit. Most of my praises however have already been said by other people so I’ll try to be a little original. Even it might not be as long as my explanation for the things I dislike. The characters are so realistic and it’s clear that a lot of time and effort was put into how they interact with each other. They feel like real people. I don’t know how to describe it. It just “flows” nicely. The characters are just so likable (minus Sarah) and they just have this natural charm to them. And even though I think that some of the ways you express emotions can be a little cliché. It’s still nice that they exist instead of it just being some dumb smut story about where the only things people fear are feeling horny and feeling terrified. You’re also very descriptive too and it’s crystal clear that you put so much time and effort into this story. Thank God you’re co author finally got you to publish this out here because it’s just so good, 

 The level of detail in this story is staggering, , especially in how you portray the immense disparity in scale between Lilies and Brobs. The depiction of Magna Gratia’s encounter with Jeannies mother genuinely horrified me. The way you described Lou hugging Ori in what they believed to be their final moments, transforming a seemingly ordinary character into a harbinger of doom radiating an aura of despair and destruction, is both ludicrous and profound, a talent I could never replicate. However, I struggle to fathom the enormity of these colossal beings, but I acknowledge that envisioning something as towering as Mount Everest is no easy task. If there’s any way to assist me in grasping their size, perhaps a visual aid, such as a picture, would be helpful. I did see the render of Jeannie and Magna Gratia on your Patreon. Is that an accurate representation? I suspect I might be imagining them as even larger than they truly are.

 Nonetheless, what I yearn for most is an expansion of your world-building. While the concept is not entirely novel in the size community, I find myself deeply enamored with the world you’ve crafted. It’s regrettable that not many authors explore this aspect, though it is undeniably the crux of the story. I desire a deeper understanding of the Brobdingnagians beyond their perspective on size. What is their culture like? Are they individualistic or more communal in nature? How does their government function? Is it a unitary or federal system? They seem to resemble a republic or a form of democracy, but what kind precisely? Do they function like states or is it a constitutional monarchy? What defines being a Brobdingnagian? What are the pros and cons of their society? You briefly mentioned the Brobs celebrating Christmas; does that suggest a significant number of them are Christians? How did this come about? Did the Gulliverians play a role in their religious beliefs? As peculiar as it may sound, the prospect of a Brobdingnagian inquisition is fascinating! You have such an interesting world and It brings me great joy to even just learn about the small stuff. 

Now I get that this is kinda supposed to be the “wholesome version of Cities In The Cellar (and the version that’s you know…..actually good) but I really want to see some some Gulliverian characters. Again I have to state that the world  you’ve created has so much potential. It would be interesting to see there perspective. To see the perspective of someone in size limbo, where you’re both colossal and minuscule. It would be a great way for us to get to understand their culture and their relationship with brobdignagians. Perhaps there is hostility between the two. What’s there government like? Are they radically different in terms of ideology? It would be pretty cool to read about a Cold War between Brobdignag and Gulivaria. 

On top of that, I had a couple of stupid and borderline pointless questions I wanted to ask you because, of course, I do. This time, however, I also had some questions on the development of Magna Gratia.

My first question was: What are the nations that exist in this world? Is it just Gullivaria and New Brobdignag, or are there other Brobdignagian countries?

Are Nick and Ori literate? I mean, I would imagine most remnants aren’t since it's not like they can go to school, and I doubt reading helps much with survival.

What kind of college does Jeannie go to? Is it prestigious? What's it called? (The reason I'm asking this is that I'm currently going through the college admissions process, so it's kinda the only thing I can think about, unfortunately.)

What's Jeannie's dad like? Did she get her merciful and caring personality from him? I mean, there is no way she got it from her mom.

What's Old Brobdignag like? Are they apart of the same country as new Brobdignag?

This one's kinda personal, so I don't really expect you to answer it. Sorry if I'm being nosy, but did you take any sort of political science class? Or did you just research some topics for the story?

And finally, what is your advice for writing stories like these? Or just writing in general? Iv been creating an overview for a story that Iv been wanting to write for a little while. How did you plan Magna Gratia out?

That was all the questions I had, but before I end this, I just wanted to say thank you. Thank you for not only writing such a wonderful story but also taking the time out of your day to respond to random creeps who have a thing for giant people. You have responded to literally every comment you have gotten. Not a lot of people here do that. You're a great person and a hella good author. I'm even a little jealous of your talent to write. Keep on writing and again thanks for publishing this for all of us to enjoy.

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