I like the concept of the story quite a bit. Would have preferred a bit larger shrinkie (maybe an inch as opposed to 1/2 inch). Like the description of the girl's friend accidentally and unawarely swallowing the boy and it's always fun to have that race with time on trying to get him out before it's too late.

Pretty good erotic short story; would have liked a little more back story on the relationship between Amanda and Matthew. To me, the buildup is very important to the overall effect of the story, so even though the story is well written, it needs that extra bit of oomph.

A different kind of vore story. A bit sad and sappy, but with a good ending.

Well written.

Very erotic story and novel idea; I have to admit, I hoped Sam would get digested and he kind of wanted it. I'd like to see more stores revolved around KINKS, whether it's a continuation of Sam, Debbie, Ben, Alice, etc or even other characters. You've set up an interesting locale there.

I agree with Gershwin's review, but I'm gonna be a little kinder in the review, as I really like the idea of Sorority shrinkies and I thought you did really well with the Susan-Quinn (really like her teasing dialogue towards him and how she worked herself up to eating him) and Jenny-Jacob. I thought the crush deaths with Cindy and in the Quarry were done a little too flippantly as well as a couple of the vore deaths. That said, I would encourage you to keep writing - you'll only get better the more you write.

Here's what I would recommend if I were doing the story:

1. Use a little more backstory and dialogue for the couples that knew eachother and as they walked up to the Sorority House.
3. Used some more games for the shrinkies (truth-dare, zipling), perhaps a little femdom stuff (shrinky ball-gags, where the shrinky tries to keep out of the mouth - this could have been a game amongst the women), perhaps even a game of shrinky pinball to get the crush element in.

Just finished with the first 4 chapters - absolutely great story thus far. Wonderful pacing, with great backstory, character description and build up of suspense.

I'll continue reading, but I notice the story is not completed. Based on what I've read thus far, I think it would only be fitting if Allison was the one to finish poor Ryan off, perhaps in the following outline:

- Emily is once again lax while shopping at the mall. Ryan gets kidnapped by a person who sells him to 'It's a Small World'. A distraught Emily accompanies Allison to the store the next day, Allison convincing her to go with to try to cheer her up. While buying some toys there, Allison buys a set of 10 shrinkies, while Emily holds back. Allison is shocked to see one of the shrinkies is Ryan. On the way out of the store, she offers a shrinky to Emily, who, like Ryan in chapter 4, notices there are only 9 shrinkies in the bag (Ryan is secretly inserted). They go out to dinner, where Allison comes on to Emily (Allison is not happy with her boyfriend and Emily has just lost hers and the two have found each other attractive for a long time; Allison pushes Emily to go that next step). They go back to Allison's place, where, while performing oral sex on Emily, Allison vores Ryan. Emily is unaware the shrinky they've been playing with was Ryan.  Just a thought.

Seldom have I been more disappointed in a story as I am with this. For 3/4 of the story, this was a great erotic tale, well written, with a great villainess and her interesting young prey. But that 2nd shrinking just completely obliterated things for me and was against everything written about the girl's motivations up to that point. What sexual or actual hunger motivation could be quenched from eating a...crumb?  Personally, I'm thinking 1.5 to 2 inches is the perfect swallowing size, but I could live with the original shrinking to .75 inches. But now down to a crumb? Very disappointing.

I thought about rating this lower, but just felt that the bulk of the story was so good, that I couldn't go below a 6.

This one is simply a great little story and idea. Wouldn't have minded a bit more buildup/dialogue, but it's well done as is.

Very well written. A good erotic tale. I liked the POV of the tiny and the various sizes of the shrinkies. Of course, the largest of the shrinkies was saved for insertion, haha. I really liked the description in late chapter two of how the POV shrinky was caught by her, as he just happened to be nearby and was entranced as he watched Poison Ivy kiss and shrink his boss. Wonder if some thought was given to putting that part in earlier?

Sorry, I found the story annoyingly and torturously repetitive. The poor creature should have gone hoarse with all the yelling he tried. No buildup of suspense. Storytelling at it’s worst.