Reviewer: titanic Signed 
Date: May 11 2022
Title: Chapter 11: The Flying Game
Theo took being tossed a couple stories into the air awfully calmly. He really does trust Camille a lot already. That was a bit presumptuous of Camille to start throwing him like that without any warning or explanation, but it worked out. I wonder if this was the kind of thing she meant about girls being aggressive when they were talking at the restaurant earlier. I interpreted it as malicious, but maybe it’s just playful. Good on Gen for helping him out without messing with him, she’s really changed fast.
“Oh, outside I could get you going up maybe forty feet.” Based on the strength she’s displayed so far, Camille’s really underestimating herself here. I’m not sure whether I feel more jealousy or pity for dudes on Atlasia (that’s a lie, it’s obviously jealousy.)
My prediction is Roxanne is gonna be a genius academically, but maybe a bit of a disaster socially/emotionally. I’m guessing she got into college early, but she's a “square peg in a round hole” and just doesn’t fit in yet. Her body is not at all gonna match her maturity. I have no idea about the "competitive bitches" and "big mad" part though.
Despite seeming pretty great overall, I had a couple doubts about Camille earlier in the story. The threats regarding her sister seemed a bit over the top, and her intent when she chased Theo down was questionable. Now, though? Those doubts are gone, Camille is just fantastic. She really appears to be doing everything with the best of intent.
That raises its own questions, though. Why does she feel the need to give him so many warnings?
- “Because big girls can get aggressive when they want. And you are not going to be able to put up a fight. You’re just not. Not even with weapons”
- “if anyone screws with you, we’re the ones to handle it. If you ever feel unsafe or unsure, call one of us.”
- “I want you to try to be on your toes with all these girls here. And the occasional guy. They can be dangerous to you.”
- “Atlasian guys are terrible at that age. But that's nothing compared to how bad girls get once they get through that first growth spurt.”
- “Seriously, be careful of strange big girls. You kind of worry me.”
- Plus her chasing him down to hammer home the size of the gap between them.
- Plus Diane asking Camille instead of Theo if she could pick him up.
I dunno, it feels like there's a bit of an ominous undercurrent flowing here. That might just be me overthinking things, though. I'm sure there are shitty Atlasians just like there are shitty regular people and maybe that's what Camille is cautious of. However, the part of my brain that has read a bunch of other stories where things are worse than they seem is sending out warning bells all over the place. We'll see.
Overall, this is one of my favorite stories that is getting regular updates. Good work.
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