Hi! ^_^

I'm a reader of the site for some years and, despite enjoying also cruel giantesses and the likes, I'm with a rather mixed opinion about that story of yours... So mixed that I had to create an account just to write about it in that review, and I hope you deal with it as a sincere, mature review, not just an angry opinion (like it seems that another member had done before here in your story, and yes, (s)he has the right to do so anyway, I'm not complaining). If it's to accept only the positive reviews, then the reviewing system can be turned off, as it becomes nonsense at it most primal function. And I'm sorry if I end writing too much. Since I was a kid (I'm almost 30 years old now) I always liked to analyze everything to the deepest, having a better view of many aspects and even helping people with that. This is why it was so easy for me to choose to be a Psychologist.

But well, let's begin. At first, I'd like to praise you for the way you wrote the story so far. Despite strongly lacking better descriptions in the main actions, the overall/world descriptions are pretty well balanced: just the right balance to give us readers the needed visual information without taking from us the right to imagine a bit too. This is a rather rare ability among many writers today, even professional ones, and you have that with you. Congrats, really! :D

Another very good point is that your story is able to arouse some sort of feelings, good or bad, towards one character or another (as it's clearly seen among the many thoughtful reviews your story has, even the angry one: yes this can be considered good at this point of view), giving to the reader the option to personally like/dislike one or other character by its behavior or its intrinsic personal values. Again, this is somewhat rare among writers, as most just write about their characters in a rather plain manner, taking from us readers the depth we'd like to see in character development.

But for the negative part of your story, I must agree, in a non-aggressive way (as I'm not angry), with the negative review, not annulling/discrediting the good ones, of course (even my review has good points, as you saw them yourself - are you still here? ;D ). Despite having nice world descriptions, they strongly tend to the same thing, always and always. The scenarios changes, sometimes a lot, but the soul don't. This makes your story roundly unidimensional, as stated before by the 'angry' member. Before I can explain it better, I must also add that, as a woman myself, I felt a bit sad/disturbed by the way your story showed women in general (about, let's say, 99,5% of the women in your story). They just changed from normal girls and women to man-eating, soulless, women-shaped monsters. I pretty know this isn't what you wanted to show about women (or I really really want to believe that), but this is what you story shows, straight to the point. And now I can better explain about your story being unidimensional: as said, almost 100% of the women in your story takes advantage on a device that can reorganize molecular matter and gives them brutal advantage over men to just torture them. Despite your story, as you explained on the reviews being just a fetish story, it still lacks substance, even for a fetish story. I'm not saying that you should write it like it was actually happening in real world (it would make your fetish story impossible and thus un-writeable), but many real-world problems, some of them correctly raised by the 'angry' member, should be commonly present here no matter what. In example, many eaten/crushed/shoved/whatever-the-torture-they-suffered men have mothers. Many of them have girlfriends, wifes, daughters... and these women would obviously miss the killed men. Even for a fetish story, it's pretty expected a good amount of women to oppose to that new world order (usually these opposition get dealt too ;D ). Also, you showed normal, ordinary women widely, eagerly accepting that device and torturing men like if they never loved men before, out of nothing heartlessly killing boys and men they usually loved or had nothing against a simple second before. Like, as I said before, they were just women-shaped monsters, with no soul or rationality to make them something that could be called human. Most of the women in your story have memories about fathers, sons, boyfriends... Okay, there are women that simply don't care, but in your story, (almost) no woman actually cared and this made your story sound unreal and potentially boring, even in a fetish world.

To serve as an example, I'll talk about a story that was long deleted in this site when its author disappeared. Despite having a totally different background, the premise was exactly the same: women with a shrinking device shrinking all men in the world, a new world order with women ruling everything (oh yeah! >:D ). I could say that this story was pretty related to yours, somehow. But the difference is that the author showed girls crying the loss of a father, mothers crying because their sons were eaten, women that refused to do harm to men that would be innocent... the story even explained how there was a strong, world-wide, well-structured educational propaganda against men which had 'brainwashed' most girls and women in the world, successfully explaining why most women attacked and tortured and ate men, but even in this world, there was men resisting, and many women supporting them. It was pretty realistic inside a fetish story, despite men continuing to be tortured like they are supposed to be in stories like that ;) . It gave the story more substance, more material, something more of us readers to grasp at. But your story, no, it only shows women out of nothing changing into torturing creatures with no previous love for men, any men, not even the closest, related ones. Your story simply doesn't show that and it's up for the reader to imagine that. BUT the way you write about that new world gives little for the reader to imagine women acting in any other way but the cruel way, really. They strongly lack personality and the uniqueness we see in everyday people, even in stories. Yeah, there are one or two exceptions, but even those exceptions are pretty weak. And consider that I like cruel stories and had read dozens, if not hundreds, of them (not only at this site), so my opinion counts heavily. But, again, your story was roundly unidimensional and lost very strong potential with that. I mean it. I know you explained that this is just fantasy, but as I said, even for a fetish/fantasy story, that lack of some real-world considerations make your story just a very long bunch of different scenarios showing the same background, over and over and over, to the point it starts being boring after a bunch of chapters... so I stopped reading it about two chapters after the Pre-Scholler, and I just read up to there to be more sure about my opinion, 'cause I was truly going to stop before, way before. And I don't plan on reading it anymore, as I know it won't change. See it yourself: most positive reviews are just people asking for some girl/fetish/scenario. This, in a serious writer's POV, little relates to the overall story quality. It's just smut. So, if one's trying to consider your story as a true story, that one will agree that your story's doing bad. But if all your work is to be considered just an agglutinated bunch of words, those to which preteens come, jerk off a bit and go away, then well, go on, it's just that, it's already pretty clear. Ah, I don't have anything against preteens and/or other people jerking off to stories like that, as it's a fetish story. But you know what I mean.

Other (minor) problem in your story that I can relate is that, as stated before, it will lead to destruction or even extinction, it's fact and clear as water. Men are being killed at hundreds, maybe thousands per day, becoming rare. It will harshly unbalance society, and yeah, you explained some things, but it doesn't get even close of the myriad of problems that will arise of that unbalancing and further extinction of males, even with genetic re-engineering of females' bodies to let them procreate without males. Most of them will lead to human extinction, so the 'plan' Cynthia and other 'Elite' females have for a new world will just help women disappear in a way or another, like they did to men before them. It's rather irrational and pathetic, like if we women were sort of un-evolving, going back to dumb monkey stage of Evolution, despite being able to think(?) and use technology. Oh, but this story is just fetish/fantasy, it's not to be considered, or it's to be considered by the reader. Yeah, you said that, but still it's the substance that separates good stories from just long bunches of words. You're writing an actual story, aren't you? And as I said before: one is by no means obliged to relate to all and every real-world problem that would arise from a particularly pictured scenario in a fantasy story, but some main problems simply must be addressed someway, if the story is to be minimally enjoyable for more than three chapters. But there are lots of guys reading the chapters! Yeah, reading the chapters like just bunch of words, jerking off and going away to read the next when it's done and just that, or not even that. If any of them went to a debate with me about the story, I bet most of them wouldn't have mature, technically valid answers for most of the problems I'd talk about. And I could answer all of them. To serve as a little example, you reasoned (and did it fairly well) with the 'angry' member, talking about solutions to the problems he pointed out. But even your solutions don't solve most of them, AND one od your solution is worst than the problem. I stopped playing Pokémon at RuSa generation so I don't know if the pokedex explanation of species like Muk are still the same, but up to the third generation, Muk was a pokémon known not only for eating waste, but for also producing worse waste from that: by eating waste, it became toxic, malodorous, acidic, and his dejects, results of the digestion of trash, weren't good for environment at all. So you put a Pokémon to eat garbage and as a result that Pokémon brings out something that's just plainly worse. Now imagine society with ungodly loads of Grimmers and Muks trying to digest all the petatons of waste humanity produces everyday? Earth would be dammed in few decades, not only humanity, but the planet's ecosystem as a whole. Again Cynthia tried to bring new world order, just to end with a dead world.

*Sigh* I wrote a freaking lot! Are you still here? Fantastic, you're brave. You're not? Oh well...