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Omega: Inheritance by Jacksmith Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 179]
Summary:

A young woman, prosecuted for a crime she didn’t commit, is placed in the hands of her titanic best friend to learn a few lessons she didn’t earn but most certainly will never forget.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44494 Read Count: 127135
[Report This] Published: July 12 2014 Updated: October 24 2014
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Date: October 23 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Irrefutable

I feel a bit stupid speculating about the story knowing that the next chapters are already written - not to mention, it's wasted time I could spend actually reading them :)

Up to now this story is... well, it's Ackbar-quality, and I'm not sure which one of you I'm congratulating.

Author's Response:

Could've sworn I answered this review already. Anyway, thanks for reading, and I hope you like the rest of the story.

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Date: October 29 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Surrender

Gooooooogle says it's "ma'am", not "mam" (a few chapters ago; my european blood insists it's "madam"instead :)

 

That being said, this chapter was even better than most of the others!

Nvm that another of my yet-unwritten speculations turned out to be wrong (fwiw, I guessed Lexi wouldn't be able to stick to her decision, and would make some factual mistake in her confession, with the result of giving up AND not being believed...) - the real point is the constant quality.

 

My only criticism is that, much like the Lord of the Rings, this story is too short.



Author's Response:

Thanks for pointing out the ma'am spelling; I don't often have cause to write it, so I always forget.

Glad you're liking the story!

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Date: October 29 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Pieces

(OT) it seems that /whenever/ I start reading this story someone needs me to do something,... this is the second time TODAY, and I'm still at "don't touch me" - is there a curse or something?

Author's Response:

Well, I'm glad to see you persevered to review the chapter after this one too.  :P

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Date: October 30 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Apart

Wait - "another short gentle story"? omg how many of your stories did I miss???

 

I think I should have kept notes as I read, I have a ton of sparse things to say and I don't know where to start...I think I'll reread it (with comments this time, there can't be spoilers) and comment more only if I find something that screamsto be commented; in the meantime, thank you!



Author's Response:

Ok, you got me there, I'm not exactly overflowing with short-gentle stories, but I do have elements of those 2 traits in other stories...

I appreciated your comments here. Hopefully looking back over the story will answer your questions.

Time-Out 6: Power Play by Jacksmith Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 244]
Summary:

Scott Stevens, shrunken and incarcerated in his own home, faces dire consequences for his crimes in the hands (and shoes) of his giant family and acquaintances.  All the while, his mother Judy is hard at work on her senatorial campaign, and as usual has some conniving tricks in store.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Middle Age (50+), Couples , Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Giant, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Maternal, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Time-Out
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 70647 Read Count: 347719
[Report This] Published: July 15 2014 Updated: February 15 2015
Reviewer: el_rooto Signed
Date: September 02 2014 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: Brother Bartering

Maggie is good at tactics, Mrs Stevens is at her best when it comes to strategy... really, it's difficult to comment her actions (or her plans!) after just two chapters :)

For now I'll just say that MrSirk's idea makes a lot of sense.

Except that, well, that "Mommy loves you" sounds a lot like she's talking about whatever she has in store for him (and is of course for his own good, as always)



Author's Response:

Maggie and Judy are almost always scheming, though the difference is that Maggie's usually doing it for a short-term game she's playing with Scott, while Judy usually has a lengthier agenda.  Judy isn't necessarily lying when she says that to him, but her definition of the word is obviously much more twisted than it is for most parents...

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Date: April 13 2015 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32: Time-In

Btw (and this is my last comment, I swear), I used to think that Mr Stevens was either the real object of Judy's, ehm, bad feelings, or a bad thought she wanted to remove - he might spoil her public image after all.

After a bit of reflection I'm starting to think she left the tv on on purpose, so that Scott knows that refusing will not accomplish anything, she'll just make the same proposal to Mr Stevens after shrinking him.

All the above assuming that she cannot be linked in any way to his scam of course!

Author's Response:

Hehe. Well, I don't want to say anything that will spoil something from the 7th story. But you're on track to think that just about everything Judy does to Scott is very calculated in order to send a message.

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Date: April 13 2015 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31: For the Good

Misreading Aaron's comment I looked for "power play" and found https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Power_play_(sporting_term) - I didn't know the expression, is that the reason for the title? I thought it was only, well, about the literal meaning.



Author's Response:

The title is a double meaning, but not the sporting term. It refers to Judy's grab for power, as well as Scott being played with by people stronger than him (physically and politically).

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Date: April 13 2015 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32: Time-In

That was unexpected, I almost thought his dad had been forgotten many chapters ago!

I have too many things in my head to write them properly, so I hope you'll forgive me for a bullet list...

 

  • I second Jimbob's comment entirely.
  • eleven month? Just curious - he know exactly how long he's supposed to serve, or was he really daydreaming when the judge told him?
  • "I think you'll surprise yourself" - weird how Ella might have said the exact same words; I hope he does.
  • I can't stop thinking about the alternative of Judy acting like she said she might and threatening to go back to her old ways if he doesn't do as told. That would have taken a few more chapters, but I swear it's a coincidence...
  • I can finally read Julia's new chapters! BWAHAHAHA!

 

 



Author's Response:

The eleven months is for his first disciplinary board review - he's not necessarily going to be freed at that point. Scott certainly will be surprising himself (and probably others) in the future.

Thanks for all your reviews on this. Hope you like the new Julia!

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Date: April 01 2015 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30: Ella's Words

Short review because in a few minutes I've got to stop reading for at least a few hours.


What's non-canon about the 1st story? You even mentioned right in this story that "She’d of course apologized numerous times in the time afterward" - did I miss something?

Author's Response:

A couple small things. The first story makes it seem like Judy's PMRD is the only one of its kind, since Ella hasn't heard of shrinking before. In general, too, the personalities of both Judy and Ella are a little different. Judy was shown being a little more focused on making sure her son learned his lesson out of love, while Ella was just having some fun. From the second story onward, Judy's goals have more to do with self-advancement and teaching Scott his place.

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Date: April 01 2015 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29: Maggie's Actions

Certainly Nancy didn't even *try* to hide what she did... if this story weren't finished I'd be speculating about it right now.

You have no idea how relieved I am to read about someone behaving like they're family! Otoh, having to care for his siblings as well means that giving up in any form is no longer an option.

Author's Response:

Well, Scott's got to have something to keep him going now, doesn't he? Thanks for reviewing!

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Date: March 08 2015 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Nancy Gets Her Way

Oh, having read the comments on chapter 28: "Nancy's actions won't go unnoticed by Scott's family". The story is done, so it's too late to predict their reactions without looking ridiculous, but - Hallelujah!

Author's Response:

Hehe. I'm not always a 100% jerk to my characters, I promise. Sometimes...

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Date: March 08 2015 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28: Nancy Gets Her Way

Real Life had a small part as well, but seriously - it took me WEEKS to read these last few chapters, take it as a compliment; especially since there's a few more AND I have yet to read the new Julia chapters! (and the new stories, and catch up on the Omega spinoff...)

A couple of sparse notes:
"And then Scott’s air froze in his chest. He hacked desperately, somehow fighting his way back into a normal breathing pattern, and clenched his muscles up, tightening his fists and shuddering at the feeling of Nancy’s sweaty palms clasped against his stomach and legs to hold him steady." - For the 1st time I'm really proud of him. Not that he should care, but...

"lenses of his classes" (a few chapters ago)

Author's Response:

Sounds like an endurance. I appreciate you reading all my stuff even as it continues piling up. Hope you like the new stories and the end of this one.

And thanks for catching the typo.

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Date: February 04 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Where Were We?

That woman... I'm still stuck ~ half of chapter 27, I swear *I* need to think of Ella when I see her!

Author's Response:

And that thought is just barely enough for Scott to make it. Thanks for reviewing!

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Date: January 21 2015 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26: The Party

"A different set of goals"... to make sure that Kyle or Maggie doesn't join him? To get N hours/week with Ella? To make sure that Ella will not shrink(no,no,no!)? Or is he going to really try and be more sincere in the discussion you were talking about?

Don't tell us of course! ;p

(I'd write that this chapter was really scary, but I guess that having to deal with the revelation will probably be worse)

Author's Response:

Hehe. There will be answers to your questions soon enough. I will say though that Judy doesn't have the authority to shrink Ella, just her own kids, but there's still plenty that Scott's mother can hold over his head.

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Date: January 13 2015 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24: Frisky Business

So this is your Christmas present for Scott? When he grows up he'll certainly pay you a visit - unless Judy's plan is to replace "When" with "If" of course...

Author's Response:

I'd say you're on track for Judy's plans. Scott's future Christmases may be looking bleaker.

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Date: December 19 2014 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment

Five episodes of Gossip Girl... "mild"? :)

I was thinking that part of the reason she's behaving like that is that finding out what he did must have hurt her, and she either wants to hurt him back or at least not show any sign of weakness in front of him - but riczar's theory is better.

(Time to replace "think of Ella" with "tell her about the no-phone rule")

Author's Response:

Well, maybe "mild" compared to the alternative games Maggie could've enacted.

Who says Maggie's behavior can't be a mix of several reasons? ;)

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Date: December 19 2014 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Looking Up

I can't take my mind off "Then I'll huff, and I'll puff..." - my 1st exercise in "listening comprehension" was listen to the story and write down every word; it took forever, and I still remember many parts of it by heart.

Pretend this is a serious, thoughtful comment :-"

Author's Response:

I always appreciate your serious literary critiques.

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Date: November 29 2014 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Putting on a Show

All hail Maggie for bringing up what he did - that was probably the single most effective thing she could say given the situation.

Yet she made *Scott* promise not to say anything, look angry, scared or whatever; even if Judy doesn't catch them in the act she'll probably ask her why she looks so (insert adjective here) - now I'm REALLY curious to see what happens next!

Author's Response:

Glad it held your interest. The next chapter will appear soon.

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Date: November 29 2014 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense

Just a quickie: "In fact, his current appearance of spit-slogged debasement would probably prompt the girl to defend him even more ferociously to Maggie and set about cradling him in her warm palm, who no-doubt would descend into unstoppable giggles even as she willingly passed over her human chewing gum."

Either the "who" is misplaced or I have no idea how the pieces fit together; and now... NEXT CHAPTER FTW!

Author's Response:

You're right, it was just sloppy phrasing on my part. I've fixed it now.

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Date: September 23 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Breakfast of Champions

"Mommy loves you" now sounds even scarier than before; since she always has an ostensibly fine reason for everything, I really don't want to think how she will justify these kind of things.

Unless she's training him to face Nancy (yeah, sure...)

 

Btw, just out of curiosity, looking for "hubby", "husband", "dad", "widow", "father" etc didn't bring up anything - what happened to mr Stevens? Is it (will it be) important, or can we just assume he's out of their lives for whatever reason?

PS

In the 1st story: "As if sending a warning bell to her tiny sun" ;p



Author's Response:

Yes, Judy's actions in this chapter (and later ones) will indeed look much harder to justify.  But Judy being Judy will have a reason for everything, even if it's twisted as hell.

Funny you mention Mr. Stevens; he'll actually be addressed later on in this story. So the answer is, yes he is important! And good catch on that typo.

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