Date: November 25 2020 10:52 AM Title: 03. Tasty revenge
I'm really liking the story so far. You've added some pretty interesting details that have contributed to the world building which are not too much.
I was a bit confused as to why this random scene was happening but you made it clear after awhile that it was John's neighbour! I liked how you wrote it that way, giving us a little mystery/side story.
Cant wait for the next chapter and see how Pamela handles her new snack :p
Author's Response: Heheh, thinking better about this third chapter, it could be itself a short story, you're right! But I wanted to play with different situations, thus Pamela's not the only girl appearing in this story.
Thanks for liking this story so far and, as for me, I'll try my best to make this story better.
Date: November 22 2020 5:18 PM Title: 01. Why him!?
Kudos on the Cramps reference. They're my favorite first wave punk band.
Author's Response: Thank you Shade! It's nice to know another one who likes this music! I was going to another day at College, hearing this music, when its title got me inspired to write this story. I hope you like the story as much as you like the music :)
Date: November 20 2020 6:33 PM Title: 01. Why him!?
Amazing story. Please continue. I am curious what will happen next.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks a lot! I just posted another chapter, and I plan on posting the third still next week. I hope my story just goes better and better for you!
Date: November 20 2020 6:28 PM Title: 01. Why him!?
I'm a huge fan of full tour, especially when it's well done. Your setup chapter is amazing, really curiousl to see how this turns out. Can't wait for him to go on the tour!
Author's Response: Thanks, and I'll try my best to make it an amazing story for your entertainment! The two first chapters were almost for setuping situations, with some scenes of Natan's 'adventure', but next chapters will give more action to the story! ^^