[Report This]Date: January 06 2021 9:52 PM Title: Taking a Break
Good start to a story
Date: January 06 2021 9:51 PM Title: Taking a Break
Nice story so far maybe a pov of her toes grabbing the grass in front of him before getting stuck inside her boots? Maybe the guy gets played a bit with her toes and between her feet. Hopefully the guy ends up okay though.
Date: November 30 2020 3:13 PM Title: Taking a Break
Really nice story! I'd love to see it keep going!
Date: November 17 2020 1:11 AM Title: Taking a Break
So how is chapter 2 going?
Date: October 17 2020 6:38 AM Title: Taking a Break
Loving the chapter! I've been thinking about Zelda massaging her feet with her fingers, only for one of those fingers to pick the tiny up and deposit him somewhere on her head, like hair. He'd have to get out of the sweaty jungle before Zelda accidentally crushes him or washes him away.
Date: October 14 2020 3:01 PM Title: Taking a Break
Good stuff. I hope this inevitably leads to the assistant getting getting a 'game over' due to the unknowing actions of Zelda.
On a more grammatical level, are you planning to stretch out the chapter lengths? 800 words is good for a prologue chapter, but you'll want at least a couple thousand words per the main story chapters, in order to give the story any real meat to it.
Date: October 14 2020 3:46 AM Title: Taking a Break
Im loving the beginning so far. An idea i have that should probably used a bit later in your story is have some if the other girls like Paya in the story. Besides that this is pretty damn good for your first story and i cant wait to see more from you in the future
Author's Response:
I was planning on keeping things simple and solely (hehe, sole) focused on Zelda. When I do finish this story I was considering the idea of doing a story with Paya, bringing back this idea for a Shrink Rune in a new context and maybe experimenting with other sizes. So if this goes good there may be Paya content in the future!
[Report This]Date: October 13 2020 7:54 PM Title: Taking a Break
Love the premise. Maybe at some he gets stuck as her toejam between her toes and just gets coated in sweat and other foot stinky foot gunk?