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Reviewer: Qwajuu Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2023 4:45 AM Title: Chapter 1

I still come back to this story. It has to be my fav one on this site!

Reviewer: Qwajuu Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2023 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

I would love to see more of what happens at the strip club. Still my fav story on here. Keep up the great work. 

Reviewer: TinyLadyEnthusiast Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2022 11:08 PM Title: Chapter 13

OMG!!!!


I love this story so much~ There's not enough daddy daughter size stuff out there! 

Judging from this ending, is Ray planning on keeping her as his tiny little plaything? I hope Ashley learns to love it~ 

Reviewer: GTSaddict Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2022 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 13

honestly, it's hot, but I kinda want the dad to get some payback for all this BS, maybe Ashley becomes the tiny pet-girlfriend of Kloe and they together exact revenge on her family and Paulina somehow

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 14 2022 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 13

Wow!  So glad you shared this new chapter.  Would give it more stars if I could.  Hope to see some of your others continue as well.

Reviewer: Rolanrunn Signed [Report This]
Date: October 09 2021 8:47 PM Title: Chapter 1

Are you going to continue the story?

Reviewer: Moonpie Signed [Report This]
Date: September 20 2021 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 1

Love this story but did one of the chapters get removed? It was one where Ashley's mom finds her after her dad and mom had sex?



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback!  That chapter was actually moved to my story "Miscellaneous Chapters / Alternate Endings."  That is because my co-writer and I decided to take the story in a direction that didn't match that ending.  

 

Hope this clears everything up! 

Reviewer: Rolanrunn Signed [Report This]
Date: June 09 2021 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 12

I have a feeling the mom never forgot the remote. Plus, she wanted to have a bit of fun at her daughters expense. (Not realizing how her actions affected her daughter)

I'm enjoying the story and hope you update soon.

Reviewer: Rolanrunn Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2021 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 11

Alright, here's an idea for a future chapter if you decide to continue. Ashley's mom and dad have a talk about the shrunken stripper from before and after shrinking Ashley again who is outside the front door trying to get inside since she forgot her spare house key. Her mom thinks she found said stripper at their front door after contacting Ashley's boss that she'll send her right over. The mom will think of course that they have fast delivery.

Later, a humiliating scenario involving a "threesome" with both parents and their 'stripper' will have her getting covered in both their bodily fluids and somehow also using her as a sexy toy as part of their threesome. After which, once the parents get off finally after a long session. They decide to I shrunk her to finally meet her when they realize that it's actually Ashley they used. An argument will happen where Ashley while getting used to being used convinced them she wasn't their stripper but she was affected from the size machine like before and couldn't get inside due to forgetting her house key (which will be the truth.) The parents while enjoying the sex will believe they abused their daughter and try to keep things under control while trying to make her feel better and make things right. The dad will of course start thinking of Ashley as stripper more while Mom starts getting turned on by being dominating. They still won't realize that Ashley is the stripper though but it will be a technical aware chapter. 

Reviewer: Qwajuu Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2021 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 1

Yes! happy to see new chapters. Keep up the great work. 

Reviewer: Millionaireman17 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 09 2021 7:19 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is really, really good! I really enjoy the interactions between Ashley and her mother, seeing more interactions between them would be great. Keep up the great work!



Author's Response:

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback!

Reviewer: Qwajuu Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15 2021 2:18 PM Title: Chapter 1

I think you have a great world built here. It would be cool to have spin-offs of the stripclub. Have both positive and negative experiences with the other girls on other nights that the place is open. 

Either way this has been my Fav story this year, cant wait to see more. Keep up the great work!


Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 18 2021 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 8

Interesting chapter.  At the point she shrunk though, her clothes seemed to vanish as she was stated as naked.  Her clothes not being noticed or mentioned in the bar.   When she was vomited up and then finally returns home, all of a sudden, the story mentions them tattered and covered in vomit as if the clothing shrunk with her prior to being swallowed.  Other than that it was a quick and fun read.

Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 16 2021 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 8

Ashley can't catch a break :( 


Though another great written chapter, but yeah wish she could have some time to herself.

Nicely written content though here :)

(but still wish her parents became aware XD) 

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 16 2021 9:41 AM Title: Chapter 7

Now that chapter was unbelievably an awesome read. Liked the bit of humor added into it with her being trapped in her brother and he can't do anything because his parents would ask questions.

Maybe do an alternate of this one where the brother hears the sisters story and steals the remote himslefmto have some of his own form of fun.

Realky looking forward to seeing more.  

Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 15 2021 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 7

Oh wow!!!

Yes!! Finally someone knows the truth.

Loved the sexy giant interaction with Derek here, and that someone in the family finally knows the truth.

I'd say screw it, tell their parent's (though I've made my opinion on this known in other reviews) I feel it need to happen, even if in an alternate ending/alternate chapter.

Just having that horrified realization, which you know could not be healed, no ammount of apologies or acts of forgiveness would work after her parents had used her so horrible for their own pleasure, and almost killed her.


Anyway! I loved this chapter, so sexy and hot. 

Can't wait to see where this goes (though I have my hopes XD)

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2021 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 6

Ok. This alternate ending was fun to read and kept think it was gonna go somewhere else with the remote.  Especially sfter the cleavage and near cock vore.  Thought she would go all the way in and then she would hit the remote by accident on on purpose and make her slightly to big to come back out.  Trapping her in there with out them realizing it and Ray enjoying the sensations.

Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2021 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 6

Loving these alternate endings/takes. 

They're fun to see and explore all the possible scenarios. 

But I still am hoping for one where she's found out to be their daughter, and having to face the consequences (be it legal/police wise, as it's not like she can just dissapear without anyone noticing)

Sandman579 brought up some great points in their review:
I wonder if Paulina cleaned up the records enough that when Ashley gets reported missing by her own parents, the police can't trace her activity back to the club. She can apparently kill security guards on a whim for cutting her under the table. If Ashley does somehow get raced back to her club can she just brush it off like anyone could've kidnapped her? Ray's exchange with Ashely at the club suggests he didn't connect the dots awhile back during dinner, but if police tell him and his wife the club was the last place Ashley was seen it might suddenly click for him. I'm interested to see if her parents do eventually realize what they've done and if she's still alive when the truth is revealed what will happen? Will Ashley get rescued and restored by authorities and her parents arrested but leaving her a broken shell? Will they feel guilt about what they've done to their only child and try humanize her again and salvage her mental state? Or, will they just go full hedonism and justify themselves by saying she isn't human any more and just a toy and keep tormenting her or killing her out of shame or guilt?

(Sorry to them for copying their review. Just trying to show their opinions on possible scenarios)

 

But yeah, it would be great to see some alternate takes on if they found out the tiny stripper was their daughter, maybe a few different takes on the reveal/consequences. 

Anyway, back to this chapter, it was fantastic as always loving seeing these and can't wait to see where it goes nexy. 

Reviewer: Kell Signed [Report This]
Date: February 09 2021 6:30 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is REALLY good!! I LOVE the mom's attitude! I can't wait to see where you go with this!

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2020 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 5

Great ending chapter.  I did not expect the mom to appear.  Like how she handled it.  Loved how ashley was traumatized and her family was unaware.  I think her being swallowed would have been funny too.  I was waiting as i read it to see how it would play out.  Almost missed the final chapter if it wasn't for you laser pen story.  Can't wait to read more of yor stories.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback!  There will be more to come for the pen story soon!

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