Reviews For A Fairy Tale Dream
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Reviewer: Lupin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 02 2021 9:55 PM Title: Chapter 4

I'm really loving the story so far (not what is going on mind you ;-;). It's by far one of the most unique stories I've read on this site. Despite how heart breaking (and graphic) this story is proving to be so far, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter! I'm just hoping the characters catch a break because boy do they need one.



Author's Response:

I really appreciate the review, I made some changes from the original story because I originally wrote this and like 2010-2011, so I will say yes it does get better. But you'll have to find out how. :)

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 21 2020 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 1

Also maybe consider adding what the trigger warning's exactly for? I walked in expecting a severe beating and ended up with incesteous rape. In case you're worried, I'd hazard a guess a simple "tw: rape" isn't going to set anyone's ptsd off.



Author's Response:

I've been hanging around gen z too long i think. I just wanted to make sure I didnt make someone too uncomfortable. I figured sexual assualt was one of those things.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: September 21 2020 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 1

I mean this in the politest possible way that this is a major improvement from what it used to be. Dialogue's still a little (clunky? stilted? idk it's hard to describe) BUT it seems like everything that should be capitalized is capitalized and everything seems to be spelled correctly, so... Good job!



Author's Response:

 oh no you weren't being rude at all, the last version I wrote when I was like 16. I even found myself   making fun of the story as I was reopening it. I was literally laughing at myself multiple times. as far as the dialogue the story itself doesn't really support Sean characters but I can definitely work on improving that. I think part of the problem is I might have tried to do too much with too littleand it just doesn't seem very organic



Author's Response:

 oh no you weren't being rude at all, the last version I wrote when I was like 16. I even found myself   making fun of the story as I was reopening it. I was literally laughing at myself multiple times. as far as the dialogue the story itself doesn't really support Sean characters but I can definitely work on improving that. I think part of the problem is I might have tried to do too much with too littleand it just doesn't seem very organic

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