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Reviewer: VivettaVenray Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2020 3:47 AM Title: Chapter 1

What a phenomenal story. An instant favorite and easily one of the best size/power stories I've read ever. I'm not just saying that cause the content matter and themes are to my liking (which they totally are).

The pacing is perfect. The prose is sublime. Every description has the right amount of succinctness to leave the perfect amount to the reader's imagination. The world-building is mixed in seamlessly. Annabelle is a very interesting character you just love to read about. Stuff like how she views human communication was just an amazing tone setter and character development wrapped in one.

I can't emphasize the quality enough. Chapter 5 in particular had so many things going on at once, but you managed to convey the chaos while keeping the writing to such a high standard.

I'm unable to list everything I liked though, else this review would be huge! Rest assured, this whole story is professional in quality if not beyond. A true mastercraft!

Author's Response:

Very happy to hear you enjoyed! It kinda just came to me when I was reading Nanomachines like, hmm... this but with energy being ladies would be kinda neat to write. From there the inspiration kinda just took off. Definitely got a lot bigger then I'm used to writing these days in prose but it was super fun to do!

Reviewer: Jessica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2020 8:57 PM Title: Chapter 7

This story has been absolutely fantastic, and is definitely one of your best works. It offered an interesting premise, and was executed wonderfully. I enjoyed the diversity in how each chapter felt, and was just interested to see the journey along the way. Thanks again for writing it!

Reviewer: Coolman30000 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2020 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 7

Guessing by the ending of chapter 7 I'll guess that this is this end? Maybe one to three more chapters, honestly just enjoying this as a casual read before going in to reread it(if this is the final chapter)with trying to see what could better enhance the reading expirience.

Author's Response:

Chapter 8, so just one Chapter off. Good guess though! Look forward to hearing how you liked it.

Reviewer: chicletsized30 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2020 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 5

Hey...just want to say...I am Loving this level of power she has.  Awesome story!

Author's Response:

Happy to hear it, since power is pretty much the name of the game there. Thanks!

Reviewer: Jessica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 12 2020 4:17 AM Title: Chapter 1

Goodness, inspiration must've seriously struck to motivate you to write so much again! As usual I enjoy the pacing your stories have, and how you take time to build up the general world, our characters, et cetera. I found the general lore presented extremely engaging and doing a great job of balancing leaving enough dangling threads to keep me interested while explaining enough to not keep me confused. I can tell that things are just going to go 'up' from here. Thank you again!

Author's Response:

Thank you, and yes I would indeed say it escalated quite a bit from there.

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