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Reviewer: Darkflame Signed starhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 27 2008 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 1

Nice read but that was only after I unjumbled the mess and deciphered the whole thing by putting it in a word document and turning the body into PARAGRAPHS! Other than the layout the story was done well. Just try and use paragraphing next time.

Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2008 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 1

Paragraphing please

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