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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2010 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Darkflame is right. You do need to massively re-edit this, so that the narrative text is legibly separate from the dialogue. Other than that, the story was quite informative.*

* Well, except for my puzzlement concerning garhus. What are they; gargoyle/human hybrids?

Reviewer: Darkflame Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2008 1:24 AM Title: Chapter 1

Nice read but you may want to paragraph the writing. its just that it's to crowded into one massie slab. Also add spacing between the full stop and the next sentence. I missed the meaning of some sentences because i didn't spot the end.

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