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Reviewer: The Micro Giant Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2020 11:09 AM Title: CH1 Homework The Homunculus

Very fun story! I love stuff set in a fantasy/D&D inspired world. I’ve even written a few myself. My main suggestion/critique would be that I wasn’t quite sure what size the elf was shrunken to in the second chapter. Maybe be more explicit with the size or go into more detail in describing it. Also keep the size of characters in mind. Half a foot tall may not be much to a full sized person but it would be to a 3 foot goblin.

Over all, great work and I hope to see more!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your comment! I will edit in some changes!

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