[Report This]Date: June 24 2020 11:39 PM Title: Defeated
Wait, only 1 chapter left? I thought this was maybe a third of the way into the story. I thought maybe Paul would be passed onto Hannah or maybe reunited with Katelyn or something.
Since the parts with Brie took a good percentage of the story, I assumed this Paul would have long sessions like this with other characters as well.
Hmm. Well, in terms of an ending, he could die? Maybe he grows back to normal somehow. The one happy ending I want to see is if Hannah shows up and collects him.
Basically Paul has been with Brie for a while now, so if there’s one chapter left, Paul is likely to still be with Brie. So it’s hard to predict something other than Brie doing something to Paul.
Well, I can’t wait for this next chapter!
(Also, I’m wondering if you considered making a spinoff story of the shrinking show featuring Carla and Andy from season 2? I think they stole the show and I would love to see more of them. Maybe they return for season 3 and show the new contestants the benefits of shrinking. Lol)
Date: June 22 2020 12:29 AM Title: Defeated
Hmm, if the story is only getting one more chapter I feel like it will leave a lot of unfinished plot lines. Is his mother going to enact law changes in the Senate? I recall she was proposing allowing Smalls the right to chose who/where they live with/at. Is it implied Paul will try to live with his old crush Hannah, try to move to a new plain Small community, be too broken spiritually to ask for a transfer, or be held in captivity by his family as an embarrassment? If Brie feels like she's sufficently broken him will she sell him off to the girl Paul avoided, Jen, whose father is a powerful senator?
You revealed quite the Chekov's gun with the revelation that a Small can sometimes grow to be a big. Will you truly let Paul or one of the tiny women who cared for him become a Big, such as Kate or Bethany growing and claiming him?
Then there's the fact that outside the repopulated cities most of the country is considered wild and only populated with Smalls communities. Paul's father was a border soldier killed by a trap laid by Smalls was he not? They've yet to make an appearance in the story.
I've enjoyed the world building and storytelling up to this point, and I'm sad that you've chosen to end it so abruptly.
[Report This]Date: June 21 2020 11:14 PM Title: Defeated
Disappointed in this story. I dislike incest fetish, but the over the top unrealistic behavior is even worse. Also the story doesn't progress as we have to see 500 unrealistic abuses first before continuing further.
You have written some quality stories in the past with believable transitions and human behavior.
This story started interesting, but now lazy pure lame fetish stuff.
Date: June 21 2020 9:00 PM Title: Defeated
this story was so upsetting for Paul... I hope he gets his wish of being Hannah’s owner of somehow grows back again.
I gotta say I’m surprised the mother wasn’t in most of the story, I mean both the sisters were complete assholes to him, i figured at least THE MOTHER of all people would still care about her child. I hope the last chapter is lengthy because I feel like there’s still so much to explore. We saw the mom fighting for smalls rights. Maybe she was successful in the last chapter? Hopefully.