[Report This]Date: March 17 2022 10:07 PM Title: Chapter X-52: The Truth
Since you wrote that the story is "already planned out" (as I remember, the plan was to finish a few chapters ago...), here's a bit of overall criticism :)
It's too wordy! That's *great* when a new chapter appears because there's a lot to appreciate, but it's bad for re-readability, and whenever I felt like going back because I couldn't remember some detail, well, I often gave up... in fact I kinda lost myself re the party (Amoe etc), I will have to reread the whole thing someday.
Sometimes the way the "good" giantesses in both substories fail to realize their tinies are in whatever kind of discomfort is... not sure how to define it, but one would expect them to be more intuitive, especially when they are not drunk.
No normal sized man... As a giant-male hater it's a bit weird that there's none of them whatsoever (something small, like "omg an unshrunken male", or take a picture to show friends when they come back etc); even assuming they travel there often because of their job.
With that out of the way... just in case I didn't make it abundantly clear in my previous comments, I absolutely -L-O-V-E- this story, and it's nice that we have come to the point when he's finally making a certain important decision.
Aaaaaaand with this comment we are breaking the int7_t barrier! 128th!!!
Author's Response:
Hey el_rooto,
Thanks for the constructive criticism.
I actually think you bring up a fairly good point in terms of the story being too long and now being written over a few years. I think the "wordiness" as you put it, is what I (and i presume others) enjoy about the story, so I dont think that removing that will be something i would ever do, but i think adding a summary of what's happened that's relevant to the current chapter is good idea so people don't have to reread it. It might not be all the details, but i think it's a good start for people. So hopefully this helps.
As to the "good" giantesses critique. I see your point. To be honest, I dont think this story is very realistic - the goal is for it to be believable though, but i think this being a, you know, macrophilia story, i tend to write about what i enjoy - so yea, sometimes it is a bit, unintuitive, which i understand. Just for your own insight, my goal at this point is that, in the college chapters, the girls have varying personalities and the alcohol has made them, well, drunk, and brought out some of their inner desires, a lack of self control and emotional control, which explains what is happening there.
For Dianne, however, my goal is show how she goes from being a "good" giantess, to now being unsure of what she wants, torn between her instincts and a new found pleasure she is experiencing due to the unique circumstances that happened with Mark and sharing with Sarah. Not sure if i did a great job with it, though, which is fair enough.
And yea, as to the giant males - that's just not my thing. I don't really see a reason to add them to the story, to be honest. I understand that it is possible for to add story elements to force normal sized men into the story, but that seems like unnecessary fluff to me, and is not my interest. There are men in the story (besides Mark) but the nature of this story really means that men (besides mark) won't be relevant in general.
Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying it, and like I said, I appreciate the advice. It really hadn't occurred to me till you posted how difficult it could be to keep track what's happening, so hopefully the summaries help.
Thanks!
-kenny