[Report This]Date: November 30 2021 3:57 AM Title: Chapter X-39: The Hike
Most high-quality hiking socks are made of moisture-wicking threads, which is designed to transfer the perspiration to the surface for swift evaporation to keep the feet dry. That would mean Dianne’s sweat will be transferred to Mark’s oral cavity rapidly, so Mark should have gotten plenty to drink.
Author's Response:
Hey Theresa!
Thanks for the info - can't say the story is 100% realistic then - but, oh well!
kenny
Date: November 07 2020 5:05 AM Title: Chapter X-39: The Hike
Picked up this one recently, and I love your writing style! I admit you have me getting anxious as the chapters advance. I'd love to see Mark manage to retain his mind, and gain his freedom, but that's looking slimmer and slimmer as the chapters go on. Still super intrigued by how you intend to end this either way.
You've done a great job building up this story and adding tension, and your detail and characters are great!
Author's Response:
Hey Drex!
Thanks! It's all kind of off the cuff so you'll have to forgive me if i take some creative liberties.
Glad you like it!
kenny
Date: November 03 2020 4:52 PM Title: Chapter X-39: The Hike
Just a bunch of quick notes, and a couple of typos that confused me:
- "No standing in my shoe" - she's really a natural!
- "Mark tiny body to pulsed"?? and btw, is he supposed to pulse? is that what his duties feel like to Diane?
- "my burnt cut lips my distinctly"??
- I was almost expecting Sarah to remind her she's forgotten to let him drink both now & before leaving (or that he doesn't need to because she's providing plenty of liquids); I'll forgive her because it's her first tiny, and he loves her!
PS
In case I didn't make it clear already, I absolutely love this story!
Author's Response:
Hey rooto,
Thanks for the notes, it's seriously appreciated. Went back and updated those mistakes. I try to edit, but sometimes i do better than others.
And glad to hear you like the story!
kenny