Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2020 2:10 PM Title: Chapter X-24: Crystal's Lesson

Very well written chapter. I really liked it, Crystal really seems like she is a natural at being a godess. I really like how you make Mark feel really small and the girls really big. All the tremors are there. Every movement is significant.

And for the last part, I would say I would really like Mark ending up at either Crystal's or Linh's place because of the scenario's you wrote with them. But on the other hand, I think you can write a good scenario with any of these girls. Maybe the tallest girl has her turn this time?

Thank you for writing and I'm looking forwared to the next time.

Author's Response:

Hey meereten

 

thanks for the compliments.  I'm trying my best to depict the characters perspective in a way that feels believable, so the feedback is welcome, and i'm happy you like it. 

 

I appreciate the words, but I want to focus on one character, and bring out their qualities.  So crystal and linh are now in the running!