[Report This]Date: November 18 2019 7:43 AM Title: Chapter X-11: The Meeting - Greetings
Excellent chapter.
Even though you said there wouldn't be a lot of action in this one, I think that the way you described everything accurately depicted how tinies would react to a group of women meeting up. And your decision to have them stay in a doll house on the floor allowed you to really focus on the size difference and scale between them.
With this group of characters you just introduced, the potential for additional stories with them is really high. I don't know what you plan for the rest of the flashback, but I think it'd be interesting for Mark to interact one-on-one with each of the girls. You could easily add them at the end as bonus chapters if you've got something else planned.
You also did a great job with the unaware portions, where each of their absentminded actions could potentially end the tiniest, and the women wouldn't even notice right away.
Good luck with the rest of this arc!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you like it! I wasn't entirely sure if these sections would be too much of a deviation from the current timeline, so hopefully it's just as good as the rest!