[Report This]Date: November 11 2019 1:32 PM Title: Chapter X-8: In-shoe service
I think you're doing a great job, especially for your first attempt at writing a story.
You're incredibly descriptive and detailed, which really helps with visualizing how the events play out.
I also find it interesting how even though Dianne is pretty playful, it's treated as more of a downside since Mark has a far different view on how all of this works given his history and the world of the story.
There are lots of ways you can take the story once Mark tries to retreat to the purse like Dianne suggested. I'd be curious to see him get toyed with by a different woman without even realizing he was there. But I'm looking forward to whatever you have planned.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Hey Sheograth!
Thanks for the kind words. Honestly, I write this naturally and things happen... so who knows where thisis going! Not even I do, lol.
Also, you're kind of a legend. I've definitely read some of your stuff before, especially the stuff from writing.com, and i'm sure it's inspired me or given me some ideas, so thanks!
I apprecaite it!