[Report This]Date: March 04 2024 4:35 AM Title: Chapter X-5: In the beginning...
Dear Kenny,
I suppose that it would be sad to see you, a talented novelist, to give up your endeavour for creative writing. It seems that the storyline would be thought-provoking if you would add a chapter to describe an episode when Dianne was amateurish on smuggling tinies out of harm's way.
Tess
Date: November 10 2019 9:55 PM Title: Chapter X-5: In the beginning...
Chapter X-5 reads like a conservative fever dream of what they think feminism is. You should watch the video from this YouTube channel - Knowing Better called “Taking the Red Pill”. Clears up a lot of misconceptions people have about feminism and its relation to men. Just a few things I’ll say here though. Toxic Masculinity is not men acting masculine, it’s men being told that they have to act a certain way or else they aren’t real men. It’s men being told that they need to “stop crying like a little bitch”. It’s men being told they can’t be emotionally vulnerable. And the Patriarchy is not just something that men use to oppress women, it’s something that works within society to force all people into specific roles. Not only does it say that women belong in the kitchen, it also says that men have to be the breadwinners of the house. The patriarchy is when a guy is looked down upon for staying home to watch the kids while his wife goes to work. Just keep an open mind about this stuff man.
Author's Response:
Hey sir! Thanks for the feedback.
A couple of points to make in response in regards to politics.
1. The political ideas here are used satirically, i do not think they are a mirror of reality (by golly if they did though boy oh boy lol). The basic "kernel of truth" (as i perceive it - see #3) are pushed to the extreme to explicitly create a compelling macrophilia fetish story.
2. The extreme political concepts are used to create a narrative and do world building, and i think these concepts work well to frame the feelings i want depicted in the story. By using ideas derived from reality, I can (hopefully) create a story people can identify with and thus find more compelling.
3. The "kernel of truth" of the politics in this story, regardless of an academic definition or your own personal belief, is based on my experience with these terms and the people who use them. Regardless of if that assessment is correct or common, it is my own experience with them – and in turn, one that I'm guessing is shared with others. In short, while i did make up the story and version of the “Make America Big Again” universe, the political ideas were communicated to me (perhaps poorly) by people seeming to espouse them.
We all have our own life experiences that frame the reality we live in, and I dont think that in this day in age you can honestly say that people have monolithic views on these things - you should look at what another reviewer wrote about this chapter in regards to his own life experience. Your opinion is just as valid as his.
Otherwise, I'm not really interested in discussing politics. As the story continues politics will continued to be used as a plot device to drive the narrative - but it's not the focus on the story, it's the dressing around the story that gives the characters motivations and obstacles.
Nonetheless, i appreciate the response and like with "Make America Big Again" i will include a statement in regards to politics so people can have an indication of it.
TLDR: This is a satire - the political concepts within do not represent what i think our current political reality looks like. My perception of the some of the basic elements of these politics is based on my own personal experiences with them, and I push them to an extreme to create a macrophilia fetish story.
[Report This]Date: November 07 2019 9:29 PM Title: Chapter X-5: In the beginning...
It's strange. I was almost beaten to death by my mom around 20 years ago, so that I would learn to realize that women were not playthings. I have gynophobia due to that, but for some reason, I also have Macrophilia. Those two things seem to not go together but I have them for some reason. I understand that this may be extreme in some peoples eyes, but when my first and only girlfriend reported to the police that I raped her on the first date, they believed her. Completely ignoring the fact that I was raped by her. My testicles were stomped on repeatedly. And I was almost unconscious. She was congratulated for how good she had defended herself. So, to be honest, this sort of thing is actually believable. I love the concept of the railroad though.
Author's Response:
Hey man.
I'm not sure what to say, but I'm glad you shared. I have my own mixed feelings and issues - this story is somewhat based on my own life experiences as well (obviously not the being one inch tall trapped in a womans shoe part though lol)
In any case, thanks for the review! Maybe you'll recognize bits of yourself in some of my crazy imagination and recognize you're not the only one out there with this wild oxymoronic desires... or something
-kenny
Date: November 07 2019 2:06 AM Title: Chapter X-5: In the beginning...
Loved the dollhouse. More with Ms. Trent please.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're enjoying the story!
For clarification, the Dianne rabaow (flight attendant) isn't the Dianne Trent who is the president. I only realized after i published the story that I happened to use a character with a remarkably similar name. I guess that's inspiration.
Not sure if you were mixed up but i just want to be clear.
The Madam President will be in the story, don't worry, and i'll try to use her last name or refer to her as the president to be clearer.
If enough people are confused by this I might rename Dianne Trabaow (the flight attendant)