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Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12 2020 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 3

all i can think about is that clown sheep from animal crossing



Author's Response:

I hadn't got the foggiest idea who that guy was, so I had to look it up.
The moment I saw his picture popping up after a google search I almost choked on my wafel from laughter and woke up my baby son after a brutal couching attack

Reviewer: kilobug Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 03 2020 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 2

Loved this chapter. I hope that Payton declares herself as God.

 

Please continue!!!

 



Author's Response: Thx kilobug! Maybe she will ;)

Reviewer: Benja999 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2019 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 1

Really great start!

 

Please continue. There are so few shrunken city stories I would love to read more from this one

 

Thanks for the story;)



Author's Response: Hey thx! And I totally agree with the shrunken city statement. It was one of the main reasons I started writing. I hated that I had to wait for months until a good micro city story came out. Its my favorite scenario.

Reviewer: kilobug Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2019 12:20 AM Title: Chapter 1

Please continue and have them be Gods!!



Author's Response: They certainly have the power of Gods compare to these dustmites! Thx for the review!

Reviewer: MegaFan4217 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2019 11:35 AM Title: Chapter 1

A good start. I hope Peyton has a nice tall pair of wedge sandals. :D



Author's Response: Maybe she has ;) Thx for the review!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 13 2019 6:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

Looking forward to more.



Author's Response: Thx! Appreciate the review!

Reviewer: Samuel Orona Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 13 2019 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

I like how this started out, it’s interesting that you didn’t provide an explanation for how the city got there, my weakness as a writer is to show the entire origin of the premise before getting to the good stuff. I think more readers prefer your approach. I found some minor errors, but not many. I hope you add to this!

Author's Response: Hey thx for the compliment! I think it depends on the story. I have even read stories where the writer revealed the ending in an early stage but somehow made the reader crave for the path to it. I think both approaches have their strengths to draw a reader in, if used correctly that is. Please don’t hesitate to flag my grammar errors. Im totally aware that my writing is far from flawless. Unfortunately, english is not my first language. I use all kinds of programs to filter out errors and study on regular basis to learn and understand the rules of grammar. But I still have a long way to go. Thx again for the review! Appreciate it!

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