Reviewer: whackamole1 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2020 4:43 AM Title: Apologies and Realizations

I don't believe Naomi really had any remorse for her massacre. If she did she would have vomited out Michael who no doubt would still be alive in her stomach. Human acids aren't that fast acting or strong, so assuming he doesn't drown or suffocate, he's probably still alive inside Naomi during her bath which is a pretty scary thought. William might be morbidly looking up Michael's vitals from the transponder to see how long he can last inside her. It would be interesting to get a POV narrative from a swallowed character. Poor Michael, he had the most passive role in the mutiny so he gets singled out for the most drawn out fate. The others were killed relatively quickly by crushing when Naomi was acting out of anger, but she singled Michael out for the most for the most drawn out ordeal. Granted, she gave him a chance, but his indecisiveness fed her need for power tripping and dominance, and what could be a bigger power trip than swallowing some "useless piece of shit" and shitting them out later. Naomi seems to really detest indecisiveness and an inability to stand up to her. It seems to bother her more than anything else. I wonder if that was the lesson she was trying to teach Max? When she wouldn't let the workers in the bathtub go unless he made up his mind and stood up to her.

Despite her killing so many mutinous employees by crushing, and swallowing she states "I don't want people to think that I mistreat my employees" in the last chapter, and in this chapter she talks about having to sign "accidental death forms both strongly implying that there are limits to her behaviour and some accountability required. It would fascinating to get the perspective of those who have to clean up after Naomi and manage the fallout. With so many crushed employees how do they put an acceptable spin onthat in the official report? How do they organize and seperate the bodies for the families? How do they minimize and sugarcoat Naomi swallowing Michael alive? And are they obligated to get Michael's body back to his family after it exits Naomi's digestive tract? Afterall, someone is going to have to provide an acceptable account of the events of the last chapter and a facade of accountability and cooperation. Getting the details and perspective of those who handle Naomi's worst moments and how they handle them and clean up for her when she does bad things would be fascinating.

Naomi has a regular but huge bathroom. There must be some limitations on water usage otherwise she could use up too much of the local water supply. Limits on how many bath's she can take, how many times she can flush the toilet, can't just keep the sink running etc.

Is maintenance's job maintaing Naomi's body? The maintenance team is located in her bathroom, every giant bathroom fixture has staircases for regular people, even the toilet, and instead of simply wiping off her own feet during her bath, she has 40 people clean her feet for her. It seems like the maintenance team is there for her power tripping. Why else would she have all that human effort go towards something she could easily do herself with just a few wipes. This and every fixture having staircases for a huge team of her employees is telling.  Although her bathroom maintenance team probably genuinely comes in handy in the very rare occasions when she needs a hard to reach, or gross spot cleaned.

In addition to her power tripping Naomi seems to show an exhibitionist streak. She has 40 people in her bathroom crew work on her feet while she bathes. They have surely seen and done more for her. Naomi doesn't need them around, but she keeps them around, and there's no way they and Max didn't see her naked. But her nudity doesn't fluster her or her regular maintenance crew. Max on the other hand. Naomi didn't plan on Max joining her bathroom maintenance crew but she for sure is going to capitaize on it big time. She won't kill him, but she seems to get a kick out of pushing his buttons, grooming and pushing him into presumably becoming her little protege or boy toy. She must know that he has a fetish for her huge body, what it can do, and it's power, and having him as her bathroom attendant is going to make seducing and molding him so easy. She'll be there flashing him whenever she needs to bathe, relieve herself, or have a sensitive area cleaned, and he'll be there witnessing every intimate detail, and getting a thrill out of it even if he might try to keep it a secret. It's his job now, and I'm sure she'll enjoy using her body to dominate and seduce him both physically and mentally. She seems to know she can do  anything in front of him or to him and he'll be turned on. He was even aroused when she nearly drowned those workers in front of him. She seems to be trying to seduce and mold the whole family, but Max, being young, male, and having a giantess fetish already, is going to be her special prize.

Author's Response:

Michael's fate was very ironic, indeed. But because of her God complex and others inability to read her, his chances of survival were slim. Like you say, she really detests indecisiveness and not standing up to her. But if you're tiny, you just want to make the decision that will please her, and how can you possibly know what that is? And wouldn't you be terrified to oppose or stand up to someone that much bigger than you? Haha. And I agree with you also that she truly doesn't feel remorse. I think she lies to herself and tells herself that she does... but obviously not true. One of the many issues wrong with her.

A perspective from a tiny that is swallowed would be cool. I haven't written something like that before and it's something I'd like to try. And yes, a tiny person's perspective of the carnage and results of her actions is something I've wanted to do. I did that for a much earlier chapter, but deleted that scene because I felt it slowed the story down. Maybe I'll rewrite it into a future chatper. Both good ideas!

As far as how this world works, I've put very little effort into expalining it. It all makes sense in my head, but I feel incredibly bored writing about it. I imiagine the water for the bath as having a limite, and it must be filtered after each use so she can re-use it and not deplete the cities water source. A shower function would be very limited for that reason. I imagine chefs preparing meals at their regular size, and then she just enlarges it with a sizer. But I honestly haven't thought about the toilet or bathroom issues as far as logistics are concerned...

The maintenance crew is for her body, and cleaning up after her... not really anything engineering wise. So you are absolutely correct. And yes, again, the only reason she has it is because she can. It's a power move. They can be more detailed. But it would be so much easier and faster to do things yourself. But no tingle of excitment for her in doing things that way.

I always enjoy your reviews, thanks for commenting. It makes me think about the story and character developements alot. I admit, there are a few chapters where I got a little sloppy with that. But your reviews inspire me to address certain things from time to time. And I think the biggest take away for me this time is to do some perspective writing. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2020 6:54 PM Title: Apologies and Realizations

Naomi is quite manipulator.

Author's Response:

Ha! Yes she is!

Reviewer: geeman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2020 3:48 PM Title: Apologies and Realizations

It's so weird. It's obvious Naomi wants SOMEONE to like her, someone as a true companion or friend. Not someone who just pretends to like her out of fear, but then she does thing like kill people, eat them, torment them for fun, etc. She makes NO sense. But then again, as someone powerful like her, does she need to make sense? Nope.

Author's Response:

It's an interesting thing to think about, I feel. Like you say, it is obvious she wants someone to genuinely like her (I mean, it's almost to the point that I feel sorry for her). So then, why doesn't she just do things that will make people like her? Or rather, why not just avoid the things that make people hate her? And what made this one family so special to her anyway?

I think the short answer is, then it would be a gentle-like story, and I didn't intend to write gentle with this one! Haha. 

But really, I think she is internally conflicted between hating the tiny society (for causing the death of her father, and her friends and family abandoning her), and craving that natural human affection you get from normal relationships. I think that she feels that if she can get William and Mary to feel the same way she does about the tiny civilization, then she will have freinds (or a messed up family) that understands her. Living as a giant for so long, with no equal around, made her feel isolated and drove her crazy. (If it's not clear, she's completely insane.)

But thanks for reading! And I hope you enjoy the story!