Date: June 20 2008 10:00 AM Title: The Entire Story
Having a foot fetish makes one disturbing and disgusting? The narrowmindness of this world nowadays. Minor nitpicks is the overuse of elipses (which should only be 3 periods, not 4 or higher), lack of consistancy at times, lack of discription in some actions and few punctuation errors.
In any case, this was a fine story. Do look forward to another if any.
I like the way you think. Precise, thought-out, and to the point. But I intended for this story not only a certain group of people and wanted a wide variety of people to read a quick and well conveyed story that was actually likeable. So, i decided to make it a little less tword the hardcore side.
Foot fetishes are simply a state of mind that has one appreciate feet a bit more than others. Considering society, it is not smiled upon and may be both of your descriptions. Those were simply the views of the character and a bit of me
. Don't get me wrong, I think that it's perfectly fine for someone to have a foot fetish. But experiences drive opinions,and opinions drive other opinions to be similar, so that's how people think these days.
As to my excruciating amount of periods, they were simply used to convey how much time was spent in silence. It's hard to convey this with only two or three periods and be grammatically correct, but my views are solid. I wanted an easily pictured story, so I picked excellent conveying over grammatic perfection, just as may excellent authors do.
I can promise a second chapter of the series, and it will be soon. But not too soon considering my busy schedule. This has been a delightful exchange of ideas, and i hope to hear from you again.
From the One and Only, Sir Lime
Date: May 10 2008 4:55 PM Title: The Entire Story
awesome could u possbily do a squel
Author's Response: I actually am making a sequel. Keep you're eyes peeled for it!rnrn Hang in there a bit longer!rn Sir Lime
Author's Response: I actually am making a sequel. Keep you're eyes peeled for it! Hang in there a bit longer! Sir Lime
Date: November 06 2007 11:10 PM Title: The Entire Story
Let's give me my rating system-
We'll start from 0
+10 for saying Feet is disgusting (I hate it in general. A nice majority of Insertion stories usually involve feet somewhere along the lines)
+5 for the room for a sequel with (hopefully) more insertion+10 for the prospect of that thing and thus makes me excited for more as such devices allow the potential for more arousing things yet being within my "turning a blind eye" matrix (in other words, I skip past the unrealistic things and just read the sex)
-5 for the whole parts inconsistency (you enlarge one part by aiming at it and it grows. However aiming it at a part below it enlarges the whole body. That does not make sense. If I were to aim at the stomah, shouldn't only the stomach grow according to the logic or is there a setting on the gun which provides a bigger enlargement thing)
That's a total of +20. Now if I can rate that, I would, so for now it's going to be a +10. Not very often you see Insertion stories like this, so good job! Give yourself a pat on the back. Oh, and you should try to add more insertion and try new ideas (Body Adventure through the internal body anyone?)
Thank you for your great positive reinforcement and detailed explanation on your review. About the growing part, a way to visualize it is best to show you a real-life situation. Think of frostbite. If you have only parts of you (such as extremidies) exposed, it will usually affect only those parts of your body rather than your entire body as a whole. It takes much more energy and time. But, I love how you are finding flaws in my writing, because this is what will mainly help me with more stories that have better relations to the readers. I also like your open mind.
Your help is apreciated!
Date: November 06 2007 3:03 PM Title: The Entire Story
That was a very good story. You did a good job on it.
Thank you for your wonderful statement! I find that most of my motivation is derived from positive statements and honest people. Remember:
This is all for you and many other readers' enjoyment