Date: November 01 2019 3:19 PM Title: Research and restaurants
Not strictly about your story, but it has to be mentioned here - https://old.reddit.com/r/nottheonion/comments/dq8kx0/you_can_now_eat_fried_chicken_that_tastes_like/
Author's Response:
That sounds interesting. I'd love to go and try some, but I imagine ordering some would be a little awkward haha. It's from an idol group too, hot!
Date: July 05 2019 2:55 PM Title: Research and restaurants
"intelligible" reminds me of https://www.reddit.com/r/TheSimpsons/comments/1i67pm/inflammable_means_flammable_what_a_country/ :D
(you have no idea how much easier it is to write things like this than to put it down what you (dis)liked and why - give it a try :)
I almost expected Riley to say something like "so SHE is your secret gf"; a bit surprising that Beth played along. Good job Tom!
Author's Response:
That is genuinely one of my favourite Simpsons jokes!
Are you implying that you are holding back? Not sure if I'm misunderstanding, but if you see anything wrong with the story or anything you dislike, fire away! 100% I can deal with it and improve from it. In reposting this story on another site a few issues have popped up to me. Honestly, I mean this, go ahead and criticise as much as you like. In the long run, I'm here to improve and write better stories.
So far, Beth has been a very passive character. I felt that since she is an SCO, I should have her be more involved and react more to what she cares about. I do think Tom did well, let's hope it doesn't come back and bite him in the ass, eh? ;)
[Report This]Date: July 05 2019 10:41 AM Title: Research and restaurants
Great chapter. I do hope we start to see some shrinking with tom in the next couple of chapters. Regardless still the best story on here!!!
Author's Response:
Not with Tom. Sorry! He will (maybe ;) ) shrink eventually, you'll just have to see! But if he does I promise that I'll try and make the build up worth it. You have no idea how much I appreciate you and your reviews man, thanks for enjoying my story!