Date: May 16 2019 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Ariel's New Insole
Based on Ariel being 6'3 what would her shoe size be?
In my own mind I have her about a mens size 11 or 12, pretty large compared to most females especially considering her height.
Date: October 29 2018 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
My god, Kendall is clumbsy. How does she even survive?
Or even better, how does the world survive her?
Anyway, good story! And thanks for writing!
Hey! Nice to see you again :D there'll be more chapters for this story it's just on the lower end of the totem pole atm.
Date: October 29 2018 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 4 - A Normal School Day
This was a nice chapter getting to know all these different characters! Plus the Attack on Titan references were extra fun! Wonder if they'll all get to have their bit of fun with Maddie at some point... it seems like Reagan certainly might soon xD
Date: October 28 2018 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
Very good chapter I sense maybe a little foreshadow between Reagan and Maddie and I wonder what’s Ariel next plan will be maybe find out about Maddie relationship between Kendall hmmmmm well can’t wait for the next chapter to find out
Date: October 28 2018 8:55 AM Title: Chapter 4 - A Normal School Day
Nice chapter. Hope Maddie does find out Kendall enjoyed her being inside her, and that Maddie actually does have a vore fetish, especially if Kendall is the one to swallow her. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: October 20 2018 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
Awesome chapter! I really am glad that Kendall actually swallowed Maddie, haha. I was worried it'd be one of those things where Maddie was left in Kendall's mouth last chapter but someone managed to stop her before she was swallowed in this one. Weird thing to wish on someone, huh? :P
She went the FULL MILE baby!
Date: October 20 2018 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Kendall's Stomach
Hey man first Review on here and I have to say your stories are really good not a full tour fan but I have to say that was freaking funny when she made it throught jumping around saying I’m alive bitches made me roll off my bed laugh ting great job look forward to the next chapter
Your first review and it's on MY story!? I am honored sir! Thank you so much! I hope to see more reviews from you in the future then hopefully :D perhaps on My Tiny Life? ;)
Date: October 20 2018 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Kendall's Stomach
Nice. I really enjoyed that. Hope to see more full tour vore later on.
There will be for sure! The commisioner of this story loves full tour, so be ceratain to see more :) It was my first full tour segment I've ever written, so hope you enjoyed it!
Date: October 03 2018 3:02 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
Oh, no, the paragraph statement was not meant to criticize your writing style; it’s more of a commentary on what most other writers produce where they have tons of ideas contained in massive blocks of sentences.
Ohhhh ok I misunderstood. My apologies!
Date: October 02 2018 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
Good writing style! And actual paragraphs, too!
I’d recommend considering different ways to start a new paragraph where someone is not talking. Just scrolling up, it looks like 4/5 times a paragraph starts with a proper name. Just some constructive criticism is all. I love the description of the mother, though I’m curious of her name, and how you infused Maddie with some pent-up latent incestuous feelings towards her mother and her feet. Even the brief description of “the incident” where she’s stepped on in the middle of the night and crushed beneath her heel as a brief flashback was hot. Hope to see Maddie receive some discipline from her mother and sister!
I'm confused have I not usually done paragraphs in my other stories lol? And yeah I just re-read the 1st chapter and I didn't realize I was using names to start them off so frequently. Definitely need to pay attention to that lol, thanks.
Date: October 01 2018 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Everybody Knows Maddie
Ooo, a vore chapter already! Awesome! Wow, Kendall is not the brightest bunny in the cabbage patch, is she?
No she certainly is not haha! As you can tell I tried to convey that point very hard lmao.