Date: August 13 2018 2:08 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Hope I didn't scare you off because of a tiny bit of constructive criticism. Seems like this story is already dying off. That's fairly typical for this site. No judgement here.
Author's Response: Oh no, I’ve just been busy lately. I had to rewrite the next chapter as it felt a little too rushed into what I’m hopefully planning. I hope to have the next chapter out before the end of the week. Hopefully.
Date: August 10 2018 3:28 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
It would be really interesting if it turned out that Zavannah knows Marleigh, like they're friendly coworkers or something like that. Zavannah drops Jackie at Marleigh's place, and is surprised that Marleigh is hanging out with micro people. That could be a fun scenario.
I guess some readers are hoping it will turn into some kind of lesbian sex triangle insertion fest, but honestly that would detract from the story, especially this early in the story. Again, best criticism I can offer is don't rush it. I noticed more grammar mistakes in this chapter than the first two. Some of the wording was awkward and hard to understand.
Date: August 07 2018 3:32 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
I need to reread this latest chapter once more before I can post a full review, but I like the potential possibilities it brings to the table.
[Report This]Date: August 07 2018 2:57 AM Title: Another Girl
Ooooh this was a fun chapter, Zavannah seems really cool as well and would be interesting to see her interact with fellow giantess Marleigh, imagine two humongous giantesses interacting with cute itty bitty Jackie, the possibilities are endless.
The anthology series idea sounds amazing. I love to be surprised so can't wait to see what ideas you have for it. I love this story and I hope Zavannah plays a good sized part in it, I absolutely love gentle giantesses who are friendly and playful with cute tinies. I hope Jackie has a LOT of fun in the next chapter.
Date: August 06 2018 11:11 PM Title: Another Girl
Another great chapter :)
Nice work introducing another Micro-transport service woman, that was unexpected. And it's cool seeing other forms of 'transport' aside from boots, platform sandals are a nice touch.
Jackie seems to be a magnet for big friendly ladies XD
Hope to see more Jackie (and Marleigh ) soon
(jackie and Marleigh are my OTP at this point, even though it's not even at that stage yet XD)
[Report This]Date: August 04 2018 5:17 PM Title: The Second Ride
Another solid chapter! Honestly, I just want to read more. Don't even care if we have to wait a while for the "good stuff" to start. There's a serious lack of good stories on this site lately, but your story is good.
Date: August 03 2018 9:42 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Another good chapter, I enjoyed the one on one interaction. I hope to see some physical interaction eventually, but I really like this so far
[Report This]Date: August 03 2018 4:18 AM Title: The Second Ride
I thought you created a great universe after reading the first chapter. But after seeing rent is only $100 a month in the second chapter, I see you found a way to make a great universe even better. Keep up the good work, really looking forward to where this story goes
Date: August 03 2018 2:39 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
This story is great, really interested in where it's going. Kind of hope Jackie ends up moving into and living inside Marleigh's shoe soles on a permanent basis, maybe with air holes for sweat to steam through.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2018 1:14 AM Title: The Second Ride
Another great chapter, I really like both Jackie and Marleigh and it feels great that both are interacting with one another. Your dialogue and the sheer detail of the multi size world is phenomenal and I think the story is so cute. This is easily the best thing I have read on this website in a long time. Hope you enjoy writing this as much as I enjoy reading it.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2018 1:00 AM Title: The Second Ride
I feel a lovely relationship or at least friendship bubbling.
Date: August 02 2018 9:43 PM Title: The Second Ride
I am so glad you continued this! I wasn't sure if you were or not.
A great second chapter, I love how we get to see Jackie loosening up slightly around Marleigh, and opening up herself to interacting with humans.
During my reading of the first chapter I theorized there would be 'micro rights' groups like the woman who appeared in this chapter, talk about getting the wrong idea though.
I guess the micro bus service is a recent thing? or that woman seriously needs to look up micro-human related businesses if she doesn't know about the service.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading this second chapter, and eaglery await more. (also once again, Jackie is so damn lucky!!! getting the up front seat )
[Report This]Date: July 31 2018 8:34 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Great stuff! Hopefully Jackie will take a liking to riding the "bus". Perhaps Marleigh can even change Jackie's mind about mixed size relationships. Don't rush this one! Could be an amazing story.
Date: July 31 2018 4:14 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Despite the shortness of this chapter, I am already hooked.
You've done a great job of crafting a world here, and I absolutely love the concept and cannot wait to read more.
I personally would love to ride a 'bus' like this one. And for some crazy reason, I'm thinking of Jackie and Marleigh in an eventual giant/tiny relationship...
Also, just wondering, would it be ok for me to write a story set in this same continuity/universe? I just love the world building you've done here and would love to write a spin on it myself
[Report This]Date: July 31 2018 3:34 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
What an amazing idea, please continue as I utterly adored this chapter. The sheer sense of scale, character, world building and imagination is phenomenal. Such a cool premise and beautifully realised.
Date: July 31 2018 1:18 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Really cool setup, i would love to take the service myself! I like the idea of her being fascinated, and look forward to more.
Date: July 31 2018 12:31 AM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
A cool and interesting beginning. I want a ride.
[Report This]Date: July 30 2018 10:39 PM Title: Taking the 'Bus'
Very interesting...