Haha! Finally a Dark Writer story that fits my taste. While your other stories seemed interesting, this is the only one that seemed to have themes that I enjoy.

It's funny becuase I see you review many of the stories that I usually read, so I was waiting for a story similar to that and here we go. This was the one, even though it took me a while to realize that you wrote this story. Ok, back to this story.

Love this relationship between Jane and....hang on. This guy doesn't have a name and I didn't even notice! This is going to be hard to reference him. I hope he is the only guy so I can just use pronouns.

Speaking of this relationship. I love how Jane was wrestling him and putting him in headlocks and stuff. I watch videos of headscissors and mixed wrestling all the time so I loved that you included this bit. Sometimes, I see women use some sexy headscissors where instead of the guy's neck being between her thighs, it's the guy's head stuck in between, and if his face is facing her crotch, that's one headscissors lock I wouldn't mind being stuck in. My favorite parts during the wrestling is when the woman would humiliate the guy by sitting on his face and forcing him to lick her. The guy is too exhausted to fight back. I love it.

In this scene, Jane seems really big compared to him. I mean, how does he fit in her shirt? Girl's shirts are usually snug tight so this guy must have been wrapped up into her really well. That was hot though. Being trapped against her boobs as her shirt traps him. Just curious, are you a fan of bondage? Such as when a girl ties up a guy and takes advantage of him? I have seen a seen where a guy is trapped in her shirt, so this is awesome.

One thing that annoys me a lot in this story is how often they call him "dumbass." It gets overused way too much, especially since I just binge read all 4 chapters at once. At least change up the nicknames. I like the introduction of pet, and sometimes when Miss Becker calls him it. Kinda funny, but likewise, if used too often, that too could become stale quickly.

Speaking of Miss Becker, she is my favorite character in this story, believe it or not. I get tired of authors shoving parents to the side so the "kids" have their fun, but when a parent, especially the mom shows up, it gets really interesting! Of course I don't mean the guy's mom. But including the girl's mom is always a bonus in my book.

I love how Miss Becker wants to make him please her and I am so anxious for that to happen. I see her as this kinky single mom who has been waiting for months for some pleasure and now she will likely get some. I enjoyed the tease where Miss Becker thought of putting her thong in his mouth for the night. That would be awesome! In addition, I relished the moment when Miss Becker sat on his face. She knows how to have fun with him. While Jane seems like the playful, flirty type, Miss Becker definately knows what she wants after her years of experience and I can easily see her as the sexual one. I can imagine her bed with four posts on the corners where she has straps hooked on each corner ready for a victim to tie each limb to each post. Hmm.

But I think you already can guess what I have in mind if you are familiar with my reviews. I would love to see Miss Becker shrink him to 2-3 inches and tie him to the inside of the front of her panties so when she puts them on, he gets trapped facing her crotch. Then she can put on some tight yoga pants or leggings or maybe tight jeans to further restrain him. I can see her rubbing the front of her panties with her fingers as she is pressing him further into her, but the panties don't let him get swallowed up. Her pussy lips surround him and try to devour him, but they can only kiss him as his body is all tied up.

I am excited for the future of this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Hey Tom, thanks for the review.