Reviewer: smotherslave101 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2018 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

Really liking this so far on chapter 2 but really good keep it up

Reviewer: scrymgeour Signed [Report This]
Date: October 14 2018 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

Responding to the reviewer below, who said, ''I hoped for some different kind of story...with a all loving realtionship and no domination": What a petty excuse to give a story you admittedly liked a half-star rating. Totally unjustified, and ignoring the fact that it's more than possible to show a loving gf/bf connection based on power dynamics (reflected in the vast difference in physical size between the lovers) and the fact that domination needs submission in order to be what it is (and that often in writing stories like that you can represent this D/s relationship in a playful, loving, and realistic way without compromising the violent and domineering side of things in the least) -- ignoring all that, you have to let the author finish the story before expressing your disappointment with the path it's taking. 

For what it's worth, I'm loving this story. Only suggestion I'd make, from an author's perspective, would be (in your next story) to consider taking a more detached authorial role. Third person, no present tense except in dialogue, and finding a way to develop and deepen your characters through dialogue and actions (in fetish stories I think plot's far less important than character, and that's natural enough).

Keep going though. I loved your ideas in Rachelle's Sweat Pads, too. Really top notch stuff.

Author's Response:

Thank you, and I mean that in several ways.  Your kind defense of my characters relationships is very well taken.  I try not to front load my stories with too much ground work; rather I prefer to add and build them up as the stories progress.

As to the perspective, that is something I have to work through.  One problem I often have reading the works of others, whom I applaude, are the names or descriptions of characters.  It's hard to submerse myself into a story when the name of the first person is contantly mentioned and not my name.  That's why my stories often do not contain the name of the first person.  It's also odd when the super hot girl has the same name as a family member or close friend, uh ewe...  That said, sometimes having a vague description leaves a lot open to the imaginations of the various readers.

I like the present tense for ongoing stories; but I do have some that are definitely past tense.  Third person, well there is one story I am writing that I consider my opus, so to speak.  It's about a group of female soldiers in a future war with some rather unique, shall we say weapons, and very derriere oriented.  It's present tense but definitely third person.  Maybe oneday I'll finish writing it out and possibly post it.

Glad you enjoyed "Rachelle's Sweat Pads", hardly anybody read it.

Reviewer: tokubetsu Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2018 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

Really good stuff, especially the nano stuff and the dehumanisation. If he could be reduced to nano size or transformed into an object without one of them knowing, that opens up some interesting unaware options too. 

Reviewer: ShortyNed Signed [Report This]
Date: July 10 2018 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

Love it so far. Jane has complete control over him and forces him to do more humiliating tasks which is amazing!
I'm hopeful that there would be sexual content in the story but there are glimpses and it's rated X so I think my hope will come true a86;a039;
Please continue, this is beautiful

Reviewer: DollSize Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2018 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

i agree LOVE 1 ft. love two gentle women but not baby part....i do hope they both have big breasts n perhaps demand some attn lol

Author's Response:

Kindly see previous responses concerning baby treatment.  As to Jane and her mother having "big breasts", I'm sorry to disappoint you.  Jane and her mother Miss Becker each have HUGE Breasts!  And they're wonderous to behold  ; )   

Reviewer: Vintovka Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2018 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

This is great!  It's nice to see a story about a tomgirl where it's just a normal, strong, playful girl.  It's a little heavy on dialogue and exposition, but that's hardly a crime.  Can't wait to see how else she plays with his size.

Reviewer: Mcpoax Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25 2018 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny

Interesting premise, keep writing