Date: May 14 2018 8:33 PM Title: Chapter 11 - The End
I'm surprised by how calm Samantha is, I'd think she'd be arrested the second she got back to her home country. There's NO way someone from the tiny people doesn't contact the giant authorities. There are thousands of them and many of them have witnessed the havoc Sam has brought, it's not like she'll be around to threaten them after she leaves so what's stopping someone from telling on her? I guess the story just kind of glances this over in favor of letting Sam have her fun. I remember somewhere in the beginning a mention that she threatened to kill the families of the students if they went for help or didn't come to school so that sort of explains why there weren't tiny policemen attacking her, etc.
But didn't she just destroy part of the town here? So how's she gonna get away with that? Again, I'm sure its not the point of the story to nitpick these things, it's just sort of glossed over but im kind of "suspension of disbelief" guy and I like things to make sense "in universe". I remember also that Bree talks about how most giants are nice and not murderers, etc, Sam is a rarity it seemed like, so it's not like the giants would be okay with what she did right? I get that these stories are pure fiction but if there was some internal logic for why she would get away with this or if she was arrested it'd add alot to this imo.
Pretty good tho. For standard gts murder-shlok this was enjoyable. Just wish there was more internal logic to explain things that don't really make sense. I think when the world itself is fleshed out and there is internal consistency it spices the stories up alot.
Author's Response:
Hey, author of this gts murder-schlock right over here .
I actually really love your comment, it's everything I've thought I should make this story. I really want this to be a flushed out world I can keep going back to and make things work, but of course sexiness also has to take priority, and cruelly is the hottest so... Gotta work around that . So I'll try answering your questions the best I can.
The first one, about the police and all, this is a nanoverse, so even if there were cops it's not like they could do anything against her. The world is about half the population being normal sized, or giants, and another part being nano. That's the main difference from the real world. Here nanos are seen as kind of an interior human race. Sure there's some people who value all life, but most people don't care, the average person sees them nowm as pests. I did already bring up some cooperation and integration but let's say that's a small effort and they mostly keep separate for obvious reasons . So it kind of goes that most people wouldn't care about stepping on them, because that would probably already happen a bit, so it's either overlooked or just barely even against the law . It's like a big social divide .
Plus, she took some in a bottle, a LOT in a bottle, that's a hostage situation! They call, she eats them. Plus it's not like the police it government are really going to worry much about a teenager playing with some talking bugs.
Really I hope this helps, but ifI love to hear from you again, email me at goddesslucy952@hotmail.com or find me on DA, Goddess-Lucy or whatever.