Reviews For Omnipotent Mom
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Reviewer: bryanw3614 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2022 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

great story, would love to see it continue

Reviewer: gtslover64 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 14 2022 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 6: Morning Routine

Love it!!! This mom is such a great character! I also have an idea. How about having it to where she becomes the world? You would have people having to survive by eating skin flakes and boogers, drink sweat and milk, and having to live in hair huts.

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 05 2020 4:59 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

Great read. Would love to see a background story on the ring. Where did it come from? Or history of it’s previous uses by prior owners.

Reviewer: Ess-rets Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22 2020 1:22 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

New chapter of mom let's go! She really rules everything now 

Reviewer: Goddessruler Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2020 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

Would be willing to commission more chapters of this as well if that’s what it takes to get more

Reviewer: Goddessruler Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2020 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 5: Mom and Daughter bonding time

I know it’s been two years but please do more. This is an all time favorite of mine!

Reviewer: Trap Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2018 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

This is a pretty fun little romp! The characterization is absolutely engaging, and lead to some nice action. The sense that the title character doesn't exactly understand the scope of what she's causing only further enhances the power disparsity. The chapter "Momdom and Chocolate" is probably my favorite, because it draws the most attention to that fundamental disconnect - and I love the descriptions of her accidental actions, and nonchalant reactions afterwards. It's also nice how not every aspect of reality control entirely revolves around worshipping her; you get across a great sense of her personality from how replays of her favorite shows and insistence on health and hygiene float around her idle commands. The whimsical tone, lack of destruction, and mind-controlled happiness everyone's in make you really cheer along, it's like a comfortable visit.

Now, for the constructive criticism: the word "mom" appears 98 times so far in the story, not counting variations like "mommy". This isn't incredibly jarring when the kids are in focus, but it gets a little odd when they're more minor characters: more specifically, upon the founding of Mommyland. If Jenny had found the amulet, would she name the planet "Daughterland", or "Sisterland"? Granted, now that her children are getting an expanded role, I feel like this'll be less apparent.

As well, I think the story could really benefit from a few more juicy, delicious peaks at life in Mommyland. I like what I've seen of that, and you've brought some nice world-shaking changes; and while I love the pacing, taking a moment to pause the action, and really soak in just how much this woman has changed everyday life, how her immense curves look to the world, could really round out the story even fuller.

Overall, top-notch stuff. Very excited to see how the dynamics change with time, both with the extra players involved and the mother getting more used to her role. I love it when the power scales shift, and someone who was below a set of feet is now towering in the clouds!



Author's Response:

I really appreciate the review! As someone who's super ammeture and doesn't write very often, I'm really thankful for the big feedback 

Right now I'm actually considering taking back the newest chapter, and steering the story in a different direction. Having the next newest chapter be from the perspective of a normal person as they succumb to the whims of their new maternal deity; as well as having the story primarily focus on her. Though I'm definitely going to go through and do a quick edit at some point and replace some of the "mom"'s now that you pointed it out :P

hope you're having an awesome day!

Reviewer: DragonSnu Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 04 2018 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

I’m not into incest but this is good stuff, keep it up! :) I especially liked the beginning of “momdom and chocolate” with the pussy stuff. I would like if she had a harry bush. Maybe one chapter could have her fucking her normal sized husband (or son if you really like this incest) with them unaware of the world’s position on her vag/ in her bush and he creampies over it. Maybe give cutaways to the people’s view from the surface. Also just having her masturbate would be cool

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 23 2018 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

This is actually a very cool concept, well done.

Reviewer: The Micro Giant Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 22 2018 1:17 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

This is a very fun story. I really hope you continue it! The character is genuinly fun to read. She has a nonchalant approach to being all powerful and it makes me crave more as a reader!



Author's Response:

I'm so happy you like it! I'm actually a big fan of your story "Is this just fantasy?" c:

Reviewer: Hongo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13 2018 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

This is amazing! I love this story. Please, please keep going with the mom character. I would love to see her turn evil and crush them, or maybe she gets angry, or summons someone who she wants revenge on and ends up crushing his/her entire city.

 

Someone also suggested that you introduce an Aunt character. That would be lovely as well, as long as she's mean!

 

 

Reviewer: Tehleris Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 13 2018 12:29 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

Like this quite a lot, but would have loved to see her toy more with her doll-sized twins!

Reviewer: zbh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 3:43 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

Maybe do one with a woman who had her boyfriend stolen by another girl, and gets revenge on the boyfriend and the girl who stole him?

Reviewer: SuperSith Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

This was a really interesting story.  It was pretty different and kept me wanting more.  I think it should get to the point that the ring decides she has done too much and it leaves her, resetting it all.  Just an idea in case you need one :)

Reviewer: Justicar Nigri Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 11:36 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

I would also like to read abit more about our all powerful mom goddess ^^ Maybe let her make a meal from various countries~

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

If still in the mood for family. Maybe a little sister/big brother scenario. I always found so fun these, when the sister gets all powerful.

Reviewer: SuperD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 3: Narcissism and destruction

This is an amazing story. I love the Mommy God Chapters and would love to see more of this amazing character.

 

My suggestion for later chapters would be a young college age lesbian getting the ring and turning everyone in the world into cute tiny young women and to be in a relationship with everyone as all the tinies have an orgy in the young woman's private parts.

Reviewer: Yesman Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

I would like an aunt character more feet stuff please

Reviewer: Lordslug Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2017 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

I am also hoping you stick with the mom and the map maybe have her teleport somewhere and have some city’s massage her feet

Reviewer: Starlord73 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28 2017 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 1: Discovery

Stick with the mom for a few chapters

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