Date: October 07 2017 5:11 AM Title: Chapter Three
Another great chapter! I'm very curious to see how 14 year old Valerie grew into the 18 year old Valerie. I can't wait to see where it goes with Sophie! Keep up the good work!
[Report This]Date: October 07 2017 1:14 AM Title: Chapter Three
My man, another great chapter.
As a gts story: I am digging some F/f action, the whole secresy of hiding little people and the relationship that develops out of the possibilities that shrinking entails.
As a regular story: You show Valerie being so innocent here, you better play out this characterization from dame to damented, my dude. I believe you got this, so don't let me down. At the same time, don't shy away from gts content, either! We need a healthy mix for some good smut and some good storytime.
[Report This]Date: October 06 2017 9:08 PM Title: Chapter Three
Good stuff
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: October 06 2017 6:13 PM Title: Chapter One
I'm really liking where this is going! I can't wait to see you add to it and to see what happens! I'll be following this closely X3
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it! Having people following this story is a good motivation to update it frequently, I'm even thinking about having set update dates if my schedule permits it
[Report This]Date: October 03 2017 8:31 PM Title: Chapter One
As far as first time stories go, this is easily the best first chapter I've ever read. I also got the Julia vibes, which isn't a bad thing, it means you reminded the reader of something they liked. Henceforth this one is also very promising.
Author's Response:
I wouldn't go as far as to say that it is the best first chapter I've ever seen though. I loved "Julia" and it heavily influenced this story. However, I want it to make it its own thing and not just a rip off.
As I was writing this reply I noticed your name was somewhat familiar, then I realised you were the author of "The Afterlife" which is a story I loved. Thank your for your review :3
[Report This]Date: October 03 2017 7:41 PM Title: Chapter One
i got the Julia vibe aswell. I to like the idea of a a girl wanting to find a pet that wants to be with her. I would love to learn more about her.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I will give Valerie more character development as the story continues, I'm having a hard time since I tend to fall in the "tell not show" problem. But I'll think I can get over it later. As of now I'm trying to show more of her personality in chapter 2
[Report This]Date: October 03 2017 10:02 AM Title: Chapter One
I like the tags, I like the set-up, and I am growing more fond - by the minute - of the idea of a girl who's just trying to get love by forcing people to be her pets. "Julia," did a similar thing. You might want to give it a read over for inspiration. I love it!
Author's Response:
I've been reading "Julia" since it came out, it's such an amazing story! I was heavily inspired on that one when I came up with this, I'm actively trying to not make it much alike though