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Reviewer: Sir Purple Wolf Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2017 3:45 PM Title: A Penny for your Thoughts

I think we know that Panny is not Lilly (though everything is possible), it's more to show us that Lily wants to mess with Abel which lead me to the question of why all of this taunting. The real question is what so special about Abel? Why she like to do thid cat and mouse game specifically to him. Do they know each over? Did he heart her in the past (perhps unknowingly)?

 

Can't wait for more 😀



Author's Response:

Thanks Sir Purple Wolf - anything is possible but while this seems obvious to us, Abel is starting to be affected by Lily's taunting. why him? why not? Perhaps it simply amuses her.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2017 1:29 AM Title: A Penny for your Thoughts

Well, this answers my question. Penny is NOT Lily. If there are only a few clues that Penny is Lily, then there is a good chance, but if there are a sequence of dead giveaways like that, it seems a bit too forced that it seems too obvious. Penny is not Lily.

Pretty sure Lily is smart enough to not say "hey, I'm acting just like Penny." This is obviously a clear diversion. Lily saw Penny one day, and thought, "hey, I will get the same manicure as Penny, send Abel a pic, then describe the looks of Penny so Abel gets suspicious". Lily is just mindfucking Abel and I'm not sure how to describe it other than brilliantly stupid.

Abel seems so gullible recently and takes a thin lead and follows it to the end. He needs to stop falling for everything and ignore the pics that Lily sends him. He gets so worked up by her pussy pics. Lol.

Seriously, how do I become Lily's sex toy? Abel, Can you hire me to find Lily? That way, she can come to me and I can stay in her pussy forever. If she sends a pic of me stuck in there, forward it to me, so if I become free of her vagina, I can think of it for the rest of my life.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I does seem like a rarher heavy investiture for the sake of taking one guy but more than likely it shows Abel is becoming more and more suspicious and that logic isn't  necessarily his first point of reference.

 

Trust me if I had her number I would get it to you 😉

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23 2017 11:12 PM Title: A Penny for your Thoughts

Hmmm, why would Lily take all that time and effort to join the FBI?  If anyone, the female professor that he is about to meet could be Lily.

It would be nice if for once Lily showed a picture of her pussy with a tiny hand or feet sticking out, perhaps even someone's head.  Seems too late for Albert though, sounds like he died in Lily's pussy; didn't Gil survive her pussy and live until she finished digesting him?  Of course you never actually said so; one can assume quite a bit until proven wrong. he he he



Author's Response:

Logically it doesn't make sense for her to have gone through training just for the sake of the hunt.

 

Right now Abel is just starting explore other possibilities so sending a picture as you suggest would validate the game sooner than she wants. There will be a scene coming soon enough where she let's him in on the secret and him alone...

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 23 2017 6:44 PM Title: A Penny for your Thoughts

And the term "aw heck" pops into my head. 

I like Penny.  But then I liked Karli, the gal who managed Injustice in Fan Girls. too.  But I gotta say...not Penny.

The leads are interesting.  Abel is trying to get where Gil was coming from.  Penny's angle seems solid.  This suspicion could come at a really bad time.  Bad news for the good guys....or it could lead to discovering that Penny really is Lilith.  But how would Abel prove it? Wouldn't that be a game of cat and mouse?

Loving the danger Duggernaut.  Gotta read more. 

pix



Author's Response:

It's the you never know kind of thing. Or is Abel starting to jump at shadows as a result of Lily's efforts? We saw Gil unraveling before she took him...



Author's Response:

It's the you never know kind of thing. Or is Abel starting to jump at shadows as a result of Lily's efforts? We saw Gil unraveling before she took him...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 19 2017 3:09 AM Title: No Stone Unturned

Interesting how Penny arrives just as the first phone call has ended and leaves just as the second one begins. Penny is involved somehow and I think she working on both sides or even could be Lily herself.

Also, this graduate student that the professor recommended was female too. Is this woman Lily also? We don't know anything about Lily, her background or age. She could be anyone, anywhere and Abel could mistake her for anyone.

I got lost with the Lamia stuff. I'm assuming the devour part was true but it was with her vagina, not her mouth. Still, Abel thinks it's the mouth becuase all the people missing havent returned so he thinks she might have swallowed him which makes no sense to him either.

You know, Lily could also use a voice changer because Abel communicates with phones so often that you can never tell if it's Lily or the person Abel wants to talk to. We saw how easy it is for Lily to find someone so imagine all of Abel's contacts being controlled by Lily, only to realize that Abel, himself is next.

This is crazily awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

You make an interesting observation about Penny's timing. Could she be Lily? Maybe thats how she lured Gil? The grad student? The neighbor down the hall? Why did Lily go back to Abels? Maybe she never left... what about the lady cop?

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 17 2017 6:26 AM Title: No Stone Unturned

Is Abel prepared to think outside the box on the level we know this case requires?

Is that grad student going to be helpful?  Or a suspect?  Or both?

I still love Penny. 

I like that he's trying to see the cases as one.  To form the connection.  I need more clues dammit!  Cuz I wanna do that too.

Great chapter Duggernaut. 

pix



Author's Response:

Hard tk say if Abel can keep his head in the game as Lily taunts him. If only they can find that one thread that might give them the upper hand...

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 11 2017 6:02 AM Title: Without a Trace

The question I have is: what about Amy?  Is that her?  What if Lilly is a shapeshifter?  She could be anyone.  And how likely is it for Abel to go "you said hi to me in the hall last night, right?" 

Magic psychos suck. 

And I'm gonna miss Albert. 

Cool chapter Duggernaut.  Thanks for sharing it with us.

 

pix

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 10 2017 3:56 PM Title: Without a Trace

Well, there was one trace. Her perfume.

The conversations between Lily and Abel are what make this story beyond a 10 rating. I love how calmly she said that she was in Abel's room and playing with herself on his bed!

Later, we connect the dots and find out that Albert is the one struggling inside her. Duggernaut, I'm not sure if you were planning this, but it would be cool to have a side chapter about Albert being captured by Lily. I could see Albert spying on Lily, and soon enough she seduced him and shrinks him.

You know what would be funny? If Abel had a giantess fetish and was searching for new videos and found a new one with insertion. It featured a guy that looks just like Albert and Abel starts thinking it's real.

Anyone notice that the last message was "pussy", which is funny becuase Lily asked Abel where her other hand is. Abel basically answered it, and maybe Lily might respond with another picture.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: August 09 2017 9:26 PM Title: Without a Trace

My only complaint is that I have to wait for the next chapter {Boo Hiss}  Another good one, and possibly an Amy snack in the near future.  Wonder if she'll ever return from her night out???

It would be funny if Lily told Abel as she is releasing Albert where she is, perhaps Albert's own apartment bathroom which confuses Abel; or a secluded place and when he gets there, there is only a pile of poop with a toothpick stuck in it with a card, like a mini protest poster, with the name "Albert" writen on it.  He He He

Reviewer: Sir Purple Wolf Signed [Report This]
Date: August 03 2017 3:22 PM Title: Cat, Mouse, and a Shiny New Penny

I can't stop thinking about the possibility the Penny is actually Lilly. Honestly I hope not cause I wish to see Abel and Penny work together in this investigation as the "ptoffesional and rookie" team clyshe.

All in all i can't wait to read more. We are getting so few for each chapter 😐

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 03 2017 3:32 AM Title: Cat, Mouse, and a Shiny New Penny

I love the parts where Lily and Abel communicate. When she said she released Gil, I pictured Lily "releasing" Gil from her hand and he falls into her panties. But since she said that Gil isn't with her, that can't be the case.

Penny needs to grow on me before I like her. She seems a bit ordinary and I would like to see some flare in her that gets my attention.

I'm curious about the addition of another woman. I thought Lily was already a lot to handle. Now Abel has to deal with Penny too.

Wait....what if Lily is Penny?!!!! Intern by day, kidnapped by night. This would be a great plot twist.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 02 2017 6:22 PM Title: Cat, Mouse, and a Shiny New Penny

I love the conflict between Abel and Lilly.  I mean that on various levels.  Mostly it’s like they are characters in different stories.  Lilly thinks she the anti-hero of some smutty vore story who sees others as nothing more than a way to serve her appetites.  Abel is the get things done detective who cares about the victims and won’t let them just become numbers.  Great contrast. 

Penny I like.   She seems like someone who will add something to the investigation.  Fresh eyes at least. 
Being a rookie she’ll have something to prove.  They all do.  She might fail to really solve the case on one swoop, but detection, like every science can benefit from a failure as much as a success. 

I’m really rooting for our hero...now heroes.

Thanks Duggernaut.  A dark and horrifying chapter and still so cool.  Great work.

Pix

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2017 4:09 AM Title: No News is Not Good News

I really like the title. There are two sides to this.

First. Abel and Tom's crew are working on this case with a few hints, but with nothing being discovered, it's not a good sign.

Then there is the news about Albert. As a chatty person, he didn't say much recently. So with an entire chapter of silence and Lily is the one to break it, I believe Albert has been involved somehow.

I swear, my boy Tom seems kinda suspicious. Seems to run the whole operation but gets no results. It's just Abel making any progress and Tom is getting notified. Part of me feels like Tom is a spy working for Lily. Everyone reports to Tom, then Tom reports to Lily. That way, Lily is always one step ahead of these agents.

I doubt that the woman from the past case is the same as this one. That would be too much of a coincidence. This has to be another lead that ends up nowhere.

Stakes are getting higher. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2017 7:49 PM Title: No News is Not Good News

Bloody heck.  Great seeing Abel using his resources.  Lizzy/Lilly, might be a thing. 

I wouldn't dismiss the idea of Lilly being from out of the are so quick.  DC is really pretty tiny.  And if Gil's theory holds true, she could be from any area she's hit.  So, to put the two elements together:  Where does this Elizabeth hail from?  That might be the plate you want to look for.

Good stuff Duggernaut.  Thanks for a deepening mystery and a cool chapter.

 

pix

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2017 12:39 PM Title: The Neighbor from Hell

Well, I think Lily is cunning enough to outsmart Albert. Might even seduce him too. I bet Lily captures Albert and uses him against Abel. Lily then takes the phone and texts Abel, "You LITTLE friend is getting cozy. Copy." Or something like that.

Ok, this Abel/Albert tango confused the heck out of me. I had to go back to check who was the main character. I mean, why do their names have to be so similar, haha!

Cain and Abel. = main character.
Albert = Al bert = I will bert = I will be tracking you.

Just like how DW said, I love the parts where Lily is teasing Abel, especially with her texts.

Ooh, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2017 11:57 PM Title: The Neighbor from Hell

How many more times will his phone go off before it's Lily on the other end or a picture of Albert tied up just like Gil was? 

I only wish you could post more often.  The suspence is driving me nuts.   

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 1:14 PM Title: The Morning After

One can't help but wonder if Lily's secret to being stealthy isn't her ability to change her own size, walk under doors and stand right there in a room with you completely unnoticed.

Will we find out if Lily really did eat Gil and poop him out today?  Where will she poop him, on Abel's pillow still all tied up?  Is Albert Kinney next to be all tied up in a text message picture from Lily to Abel's cell phone?

All I can say is Lily needs more victims.  Ha Ha, perhaps send Abel a picture of a bunch of tied up men and as he tries to figure out who and where they are he notices it looks a lot like their inside of a lunch pail or a stove pot.

Glad by last critique was not offencive {at least I didn't have to look up Oedipus complex this time, ha haaa}.  Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 12:59 PM Title: The Morning After

Alright. I admit it was immature of me to rant on this story without even reading it. I was too quick to judge and seeing another story made me worried that you would abandon Tom's story.

Seeing as you have managed to update all 3 of these stories quite often made me really curious to finally give this story a read. And boy was I surprised.

This story is reminds me why I fell in love with your stories in the first place. The "contract" and "botched" both had good suspense, drama filled scenes that made me feel locked in to every chapter.

While your sexy scenes in my opinion have felt a bit similar in your stories, your drama-filled scenes are outstanding, no doubt the best on this website.

You bring up the same brilliant principle that you used in the contract. In that story, the group of women were laughed at before they began using their powers. Cade, I think that was his name. He was the detective and he really underestimated the woman whom I forgot her name.

In this story, Abel and his coworkers underestimated that a woman could do this much damage and being a woman as the suspect was laughed at when Gli mentioned it.

Also, these hints that are thrown at Abel are amazing! The dreams, the phone calls, the missing people, the perfume, Gil's clothes! It's truly a game of cat and mouse and this feline is definately toying with her food.

I love that description of the file in the beginning of the story. Six inches tall bound with bindings. Your foreshadowing game is on point!

Oh my! Those text messages were amazing! Only true giantess fans would get the references. We know that the uppercase "little" meant that Gil shrank. Also, when Abel asked where is he and Lily showed her vagina was so funny but sexy at the same time. He was confused, but my eyes lit up and my heart beat was racing.

For the big words that DW mentioned, I agree, I have to look them up so I know what it means, but I instead find it a learning experience. I enjoy learning new words and using them. Also, I think a decent number of big words makes this case sound official. However, if it gets carried away and there are big words in every paragraph, then it would seem forced and maybe annoying.

I noticed that pixl8d seems to dislike this woman. I on the other hand love this woman. I want to be captured by her too! She showed a picture of Gil all tied up. That means she shrank and tied him and also shoved him up inside her! This is basically a new form of Stockholm syndrome for me. Man, I wish I was Gil.

Basically, ignore my "protest" rant review before. This story is marvelous and intriguing. Instead of protesting this story, I approve of it, and encourage it to continue.

I absolutely love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 19 2017 9:03 PM Title: The Morning After

Okay, fine.  I'll give review 13 to a supernatural story.  No worries.  I'm not superst.....ACK!

Heh...just kidding.

Actually Abel has it right: FU Lily! 

I've had neighbors like Albert and I wouldn't wish them on anybody, except Lily.

Hopefully he's snoopy and detail oriented.

Great portrait of DC and great set up.  I'm really enjoying how Able is trying to get things done his way.  This should be a great constest of wits.

Thanks Duggernaut

 

pix

Reviewer: Sir Purple Wolf Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2017 12:16 AM Title: Dream Weaver

Such a great story. The mysterious and darkish tone it has is so appilin. I just can't wait for Abel to finally meet the so called Ms. Lily



Author's Response:

Thanks Sir Purple Wolf, glad I was able to establish a sense of atmosphere! Please continue to enjoy

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