Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2017 7:51 AM Title: The Strip Club: Part I

Oh man lol. Here I was hoping this time the loser was gonna win. Another one bites the dust. R.I.P Ethan. The crazy part is this type of thing happens in real life were the chick always goes for the assholes. You also did a REALLY good job describing Erica's sexy body as well as her erotic dances. DeVonte is a dick though. I actually thought he may have been somewhat friendly with Ethan when he told him he was gonna make her ass shake. He really did not have to frame Ethan like that. Overall, I still like this universe you created and you're a obviously a talented writer. Looking foward to more! :D

Author's Response:

Thank you for the feedback! I'll take heed of it when I continue writing. I won't spoil anything, but I think you'll like it.