[Report This]Date: March 18 2017 12:39 PM Title: Let the Fun Begin
Nice one!
I liked the chapter, the butt crush card was one of the ones I was most eager to see, same with the other butt-related cards and some more.
The way you wrote the girls was very in character with them, the same way they would've acted on the anime. Aqua messing with Wiz might come to bite her in the butt later. Darkness meking Chris embarrassed by talking about her being heavy, she grinding while sitting on her and Darkness' reaction in the end was great to read. Also, the way you delayed the description of the buttcrushing and making Darkness say it after the act was clever.
The only criticism I could point is maybe the lack of an answer from Megumin after Eris saying she wants her as a pet. Though that may be nitpicking.
Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I also really like the butt related cards and I was actually really worried I might have strayed from the ggirls personalities, so I'm relieved to hear that isn't the case. As far as Aqua messing with Wiz, let's just say her luck will be much like in the anime and I'm happy I was able to make the first real interaction between two characters characters interesting.
As far as Megumin's reaction, I went for a less is more and subdued her behavior because she isn't entirely sure what Eris would do to her but I probably should have put a little more to it.
Again thank you and I hope you'll like the next chapter as much as the this one.