Reviewer: NotSirk Signed [Report This]
Date: December 13 2017 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 3

Okay after two chapters I must say I do like these girls. Your descriptions of them are brief but informative. It's something I could learn from because I don't often describe what my characters are  wearing for example. I feel it ruins the flow with my writing but it's something I should learn. Also you established both their backstories rather efficiently as well. I don't do that either and that's more of a personal preference thing. 

All that being said I am not quite sure where this is going yet. Becky seems slightly suspicious but not necessarily bad and Sondra seems like a normal girl sooo? You didn't tag any size categories so I can't even guess. Going for the slow start? I can respect that but from experience most readers don't have patience for it. Will comment again down the line.

Author's Response:

Hi Sir...uh...NotSirk!  Yeah, I'm all about character.  I'm glad you're intrigued and I'm really glad you found it in yourself to comment.  Believe me I totally need all the motivation I can get.

And descriptions are not something I find really necessary.  Letting your audience imagine the characters really is a legitimate technique.  But, yeah, I use descriptions.  Backstories can be so important, but also, having someone enigmatic can really pull your audience in.  God, I can drone on and on about writing all day. 

Thanks so much for the feedback.

Peace

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