Date: June 11 2017 9:54 PM Title: Jo's Hangover
Honestly, having Jo find him then slightly get attached to our wonderful protagonist. Then she starts teasing him and asks how it was in her stomach. Maybe with all he's went through, he starts to feel himself being drawn into it. Experiencing it first hand, and he seems to still yearn for his fantasies. Maybe he tells Jo after a day out of her mouth that he wishes to go into her mouth again and says he knows he's crazy, but maybe he is a perv. She smiles or something and obviously teases him. Ending with him becoming the food he so struggled to attain a way not to become. Though of course, any ending to this won't sour what was an amazing story. It will always be one of my favorites :3
Author's Response: You know, that's an interesting way of looking at it, and I certainly like elements of it. The balance our tired hero has between fearing and loving Jo's mouth will certainly need to be addressed in their discussion; and I think I know how to work it in there, but we'll see, we'll certainly see. Either way, I can't divulge too much; it could ruin the storyline! Glad to hear this has been a favourite of yours; I hope to continue writing such tales for yours and others pleasure. :)
[Report This]Date: June 11 2017 6:17 PM Title: Jo's Hangover
MORNING BREATH YAY! It's been a long time coming this story, last chapters have been amazing, more stories need to be like this one. Will we find out why Jo shrank him? She said she has some good reason for shrinking and torturing folks so was it all really just because he fantasised about her gross mouth? Hoping for good amount of dialouge, a chapter for the end of this challange and one for epilogue would fit. Here's hoping for a passing grade from Jo and some leiniency on the whole slave thing. He accidently almost kills her, her friend intentionally almost kills him he could argue that eye for an eye assuming Jo doesn't count entering the stomach as auto failure.
As always, can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I think I'm almost as glad to be writing about Jo's horrible morning breath as you are to be reading it! :D Essentially, if Jo's Inebriation was the climax to the action side of the story, this should finish up the plot; which, admittedly, has taken at least some sideline to the action. I'll probably read through it a tad more thoroughly to ensure I get in everything I want to, and give this the satisfactory ending it deserves. I must keep the veil of mystery up for at least one more chapter, I'm afraid... but I'll be working hard on it, trust me, Thank you as always for your kind words and support!