[Report This]Date: April 27 2017 12:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow you really know how to manipulate your readers emotions. Onia was so sweet and innovent at the start like a loyal puppy and Peric was abusing her. At first I was rooting for him to get his come uppance. But then when Onia said she liked him I was rooting for their new relationship. I was worried her personality was going to change when she grew and she converted to a omnivore, but she did want to take care of Peric even in her tummy. Hopefully when it warms up she will realize she just needs to puke again to get him out.
Author's Response:
Yes, let's hope so. I'll probably have to do a sequel to one (or both) of the Fyth stories at some point.
Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: November 13 2016 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great Story. The characters are well developed and we can get a sense of the inner turmoil brewing. Again, keep up the excellent writing.
Date: November 09 2016 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
Holy hell. This was fucking amazing. Damn it, ST, I wish I could write like you. If I could, maybe people would actually contribute to CoG like I ask lol
But seriously, bravo. No one out of character, and an ambiguous ending that let's everyone believe what they wish without feeling like a slap in the face. *high fives*
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment, Silent-One! I like a small cast of characters when writing because it allows me to make each more distinct and memorable. Same with reading epic fantasy. I sometimes find myself skimming over chapters until I reach the character I like.
As for the ambiguous ending, it just kinda happened that way. Originally, I'd intended it to be a tragedy ending in Peric's death. But, he just refused to die, and Onia was gentle to a fault like most Fyths. So, I left it open ended-ish, with a positive spin. One day I see myself writing a sequel to a Fyth story.
Date: November 07 2016 7:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
Didn't expect Persic to stick up Onia's ass but given the context , it kind of makes sense since they see Fyths as cattle. Did I read that correctly, they eat Fyth poop? Its kale or something like that.
I honestly didn't expect to see this type of scene in a story of yours. I did like the backstory provided of Persic and Onia, seems they both were abandoned. I do hope he treats Onia better towards the end of this, she deserves it.
Author's Response:
Yes, you read correctly. Fyth poop has, for better or worse, the same name as the vegetable kale in this world. It's edible and tastes like tofu.
As for treating Onia better, let's hope he's turned over a new leaf. We'll see soon. Thanks for reviewing, Nostory!
Date: November 07 2016 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Holy fuck, you seem to enjoy writing the Fyth(pl.?) suffering, what with both Farmhand and this. I kinda just want to give Onia a hug, because it pains my little heart to have someone suffer for something they're not doing intentionally, someone who doesn't even know what they did wrong but knows what anger from others means.
Still, though, more great work from one of my favorite writers on the site.
Author's Response:
I agree. I even had to remove the 'gentle' tag, which I rarely ever do. Peric was more cruel than what I'd expected. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: November 06 2016 2:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
Farmhand was my favorite of your stories. Even tho we didn't exactly return to those characters this universe itself is interesting enough to keep my attention!
Author's Response:
Thanks geeman! Hopefully you enjoy this story.
Date: November 05 2016 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 1
What? Stop being mean!!!
Author's Response:
That's what I was saying when I was reading about Joy and Brittany. :)
Date: November 05 2016 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
I don't like the guy , the Fyth tend to get sympathy from me, its sad they're basically slaves. So large but unable to fight back, utterly subservient. I hope things get better, for the both of them.
Author's Response:
I don't like him much either. Hopefully he changes as the story progresses or Onia finds a way to deal with him. Thanks for the review, Nostory.
[Report This]Date: November 05 2016 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
In the chapter end notes, did you mean to say 'Five' chapters? Instead of 'fyve' ? Ha!
This is really pretty cool, Spooky. The 'Other-worldly' aspect of this place is very interesting, ...I seemed to find it a slightly humorous, at first; the thought of a giantess being persuaded by this miniature humanoid-type creature. The tree names are pretty cool. And, the fact that her blood is green, too. It's easy to imagine what's taking place, even from the standpoint of an alien...
I started to take it more seriously after the 'Punishment scene' I could get into this as a much long story, ...Or, is this just testing the waters to see if people react to it?
I like it. But, It seems like a lot of work to create such an elaborate tale, and then make it so short? (Only Fyve chapters)
Author's Response:
Lol, I noticed my first 'Fyth' story was five chapters so decided to stick with the length of 'fyve' ;)
Since I have a tendency to not finish stories, it forces me to complete the story in five chapters. Plus I made it a series, the Fyth universe so to speak. Each short story contributes to building out the universe, so extra detail I add doesn't get wasted. They can be read independently, but they're also doing a bit of world building.
Thanks for the first review!