I like your story. It gives a great deal of setup that I appreciate, I don't know if everything was planned or generated by yourself as you wrote it, but the environment is easy to get immersed into with your extreme descriptions and detail. The entire atmosphere in the camp reminds me of the smaller towns in Skyrim, or of the Fremenniks in Runescape.

This setup did, however, drag on for a long time before anything happened. It's always been my preference to begin stories at the start of action, so that is just myself. I don't know, the story wouldn't work without the setup but I also wish it were shorter. Maybe some of the detail could have been sacrificed.

The interaction in chapter two gets repetitive over the first half of it, where she climbs up the ass and falls down and goes higher then in the crack then out and so on. However, it picks up when she finally escapes from the ass and gets to the vagina.

As a whole, it's good and fun. You are a talented author. Good luck finishing your story.

Author's Response: Thank you! I've been trying to address the particular challenge of length vs quality, and I hope I get better soon. I will certainly try to. Thanks for reviewing!

Damn, this is why I always go with a warrior in a fantasy rpg or even a sneaky archer if I feel disinclined to bloody my hands.