[Report This]Date: December 15 2016 2:36 PM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
This is one truly one of the best mouth scenes I've ever read! The descriptions were so vivid I felt like I was right in there with poor Julie. I really like the smooth transitions back and forth between POV's, you make it seem so effertless. Excellent work, so far I look forward to reading the rest!
Author's Response:
Thank you, I really appreciate that!! I'm also following your story and I'm loving it so far :) hope to see more from you in the future!
Date: October 25 2016 4:01 PM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
Butt stuff
Author's Response:
I will definitely work some of that in!
[Report This]Date: October 24 2016 3:49 PM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
Great to see this live on.
Author's Response:
It'll be around for a while I can assure you (:
[Report This]Date: October 24 2016 6:10 AM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
You use some very interesting comparisons. I like the way that Caitlin casually ponders the idea of life and death; her unrelenting tease, such a torturous predicament for her unsuspecting victims. Their fate completely unknown, this teenage girl has become their goddess and their entire world!
I'd like to see her capture an older man, maybe one of her teachers, or someone in an authority role... maybe, a police officer? Keep him in total suspense, and force him to submit to her in different ways...
I like your writing style, and it looks to be very well written too. I'll give more suggestions later, ...if you like?
Great story so far...
Author's Response:
Thanks!! I'm more into the F/F genre tbh but I might add a shrunken man in here sometime or another to appease to a wider audience.
And yes, keep the suggestions coming! Like I said, I'll probably need some inspiration if/when I ever get writer's block lol