Date: January 27 2017 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 14
I know I already reveiwed this chapter, but I just wanted to add how much I LOVE the conversation between Ally and Eli. I keep coming back to read it over and over. Just how each of them has something they're not to happy about having said, both of them almost hanging up on the other at one point, and having to start over. And when Eli tells her about his fear, she seems really understanding. She knows she scares him and she's trying to make him feel more comfortable. But after everything they still love eachother. It's such a cool relationship you've built between them.
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed the convo! Ally does love her brother, but she's no-nonsense. She's the opposite of Winter in some ways.
Date: January 27 2017 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 14
Love the way the dollhouse and TV allow Eli to have semi-normal interactions with people. Fantastic chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks again for the commentary! I'm surprised a couple of reviewers noted the TV. Premie technology still isn't as 'advanced', due to the lower demand (far fewer premies than humans), and less time the premie phenomenon has existed in general. So what might make a small phone or smart watch for a human, makes a fine TV for a premie. The converting between the technologies is relatively simple due to similar scale...compared with creating something much smaller like a premie smartphone (components and engineering required to produce something viable at that scale would be significantly more challenging).
Date: January 26 2017 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 14
I really liked this chapter. It's cool that he can use the phone to interact with them at normal size.
Author's Response:
Yep. Since he's not the first 'premie', there have been a few inventions to help premies fit into society.
Date: January 26 2017 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 14
Nice story. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks for all the reviews, diesel! I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2017 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 14
Very good chapter again because of the very realistic characters. You really feel for the family too. They see he is suffering and they can do little about it to take it away. The people around him in this story are very supportive and understanding, that gives a realistic feel to it.
There seems to be hope. If Eli has a purpose in the giant world and has a good caretakers so that he can easely move in that world almost whenever he wants, he might find some happiness.
Author's Response:
Yeh, I'm trying to keep it realistic. There's plenty of crush/vore/sexualize/enslave content out there, and sure, some of that stuff MAY happen if real life if someone shrunk, but it's just as conceivable (if not moreso) that folks would behave like rational people.
That being said, there's still plenty of fertile ground for conflict, drama and character evolution.
Thanks for the review!