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Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 03 2017 3:41 PM Title: 'All-Nighter'

Very nice background chapter.

I guess Melanie is too tired when she comes home. So maybe she will just put or hang him somewhere. Or give him some special task while sleeping. 

Sometime in the future she could secretly tape him under Susie's table. So that he would helplesly forced to look into the crotch of his wife the whole day. :)

Author's Response:

Oh, Man! That's a great idea. 'Soooo, close - and yet, unable to get to her! His only hope, just out of reach... 

Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01 2017 8:54 AM Title: 'All-Nighter'

R.I.P Jeffrey...

Author's Response:

Rolling - In - Pussy.  Oh Yeah!  ;`)

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29 2017 4:55 PM Title: 'All-Nighter'

Poor Jeffrey. Ms. Kershaw has him good. Being in that tube has to be tough. Painful and a bad air quality. Suzie soooo close, yet so far. Very exciting. Loved hearing how he was captured.

Author's Response:

Lol!  Yes, that would be some 'bad ass' air quality!  I hope Melanie poked a few air holes in the rubber cork, ...I forgot to ask her about that, ...oh well, there must be a little bit of air inside that long tube. And, I doubt that she makes him stay in there for too long...anyway - she probably lets him out at night. ;`)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2017 9:33 AM Title: 'All-Nighter'

I actually liked this background story. You do a great job at adding depth to characters.

So Jeffrey and Pete were the janitors and Pete got lucky of the two by being taken by Twinkie. Jefffey, on the other hand had to suffer with Melanie.

So Jeffrey was Susie's husband, before Melanie captured him. I wonder how Jeffrey is going to escape and meet Suzie while being shrunken. That should be fun.

Well, I think I know who will be involved with the next chapter, so I'm very excited to say that I absolutely can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

  Yea, Jeff's in some serious trouble, for the time being... It's amazing that he has survived for all this time, ...being the captive of this dominant 'Power hungry'- female lawyer - who is always used to being in complete control...  and Jeff being shrunken down to only four inches tall!  woohoo yeah, I'll bet he is ready to escape from this situation the very first chance that he gets!


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