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Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2016 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 15

Nice having the 3 ladies playing with him and talking about him. His opinion means nothing.

Author's Response:

Oh yeah, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 11 2016 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 15

Man, I got a lot of questions since half of this chapter felt random. Haha.

First, in the last chapter Maggie let the door close behind her so how did Diana know that Maggie was in her mom's room?

Second, how did Diana know that Maggie had Billy behind her back? Sheer luck?

Third, all these girls are fascinated that Billy can talk but after he says one word to confirm that he can talk, they silence him by ignoring what he says. (Ok, that wasn't a question.)

You know what. No more questions. I forgot what I was going to ask.

I think I changed my mind. Actually, I do want Maggie do take Billy home with her. And since you do a good job on introducing characters, you should involve Maggie's mom too, but not her sisters. I have had enough teenage giggling so far.

Diana keeps changing what she says. First, she says that Billy is a person and can't taken as an object. Then she claims that Billy is hers. Lol, wtf. Make up you mind girl!

Diana is the doctor's daughter, Maggie is the hot girl, and Christie is the other girl. Like I said, too many characters that I forgot any details about Christie since the focus shifted to Maggie.

Well, all this dress up will take some time. We know how long girls do their makeup so it will take forever to dress Billy up. And then guess what? Maxine shows up! Then it's all going down!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Well, Maggie was taking a long time in the bathroom and Diana walked back to see what she was doing, and she realized that she was inside her mother's bedroom.

And, she knew that she had Billy, behind her back, 'Because' he screamed as loud as he could, "HELP ME!"

 ...and, when Diana called Billy 'Her's', she was really saying that He was her's to 'Take Care of', more of a responsibility than an ownership type thing...


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