[Report This]Date: October 10 2016 2:27 PM Title: Prologue
great story looking foward to the next installment
Date: October 02 2016 3:17 AM Title: Traumatized
I like Dr.Azuria. She's great. More of her.
Date: October 02 2016 3:10 AM Title: The Experiment
Mean girls
Date: September 29 2016 5:47 AM Title: Prologue
I happen to agree with FTFeet below. Personally I have no interest in stories that try to be novels. Lots of action, interesting and varied situations, detailed descriptions, and fun characters - that's what matters to me.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I try to live up to these criterias as good as I can :)
Date: September 29 2016 4:59 AM Title: Prologue
Contrary to what was said in the previous couple comments, I actually enjoy the way it's written. In my opinion, sometimes it's more about just fully being in the story, and imagining it happening exactly as it is written, instead of thinking "this would never happen." Maybe it wouldn't, but it's a story, and I'm definitely going to imagine that for whatever reason, the people in said story are behaving the way that they are. In fact, I think sometimes it makes it even more enjoyable to beleive that they don't even have a reason for behaving the way that they do. I'm a pretty solid fan thus far.
Author's Response:
Thanks for sharing your opinion on this matter. I personally feel the same way even though I can understand the previous criticism.
Date: September 28 2016 7:59 PM Title: Prologue
I have to say that I agree with Pdawg. This story seemed extremely promising, but I'm going to be giving it a pass from now on. It went from being great and having a nice, interesting premise to girls shitting on him for shallow and transparent reasons that would never happen and shatters my suspension of disbelief.
Author's Response:
Thanks to you too for your honesty. It helps me developing my further stories.
Date: September 28 2016 1:00 PM Title: Prologue
I think this started off really promisingly but I've got to be honest. It's turned into just another story which is there to be viewed and forgotten immediately.
Having girls shit on him for no reason other than you can is disappointing writing.
You should have a read of Tiny Dancer to give you some tips on building the story and suspense.
I'm not trying to be a t**t here, but I think constructive criticism should always be welcomed.
Author's Response:
It totally is and I actually get your point. Gonna have that in mind when writing on the next part or another story, since this one is already finished on the paper. Thanks for reviewing and your honesty!
[Report This]Date: September 28 2016 8:59 AM Title: Prologue
Really good! Looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Thanks :)
[Report This]Date: September 26 2016 9:38 AM Title: Traumatized
I am liking this as it develops!
Author's Response:
Thank you, I hope you like the change of setting as well.
[Report This]Date: September 25 2016 6:22 AM Title: The Experiment
Nice! I hope for more butt action xD
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Yeah there will be :) just be a little patient
Date: September 23 2016 4:53 PM Title: Prologue
"East Germany?"
This is set during the Cold War, then?
Author's Response:
No just the east of germany with no time-specification thanks for mentioning gotta change that.
[Report This]Date: September 23 2016 10:19 AM Title: Prologue
Cool set-up, and a promising cast of characters.
Author's Response:
Thanks :)
Date: September 23 2016 10:09 AM Title: Prologue
Great start. Really looking forward to how this progresses.
Author's Response:
Thanks hope it will live up to your expectations.