Date: August 16 2016 2:23 PM Title: Yuna
J'aime beaucoup ton histoire ! Beaucoup de bonnes idées et de situations compliquées pour ce pauvre adolescent ...
J'aime particulièrement le comportement de Faith qui évolue dans la découverte de cet étrange fantasme .Tu as demandé des idées en voici une
: Yuna le garde pour quelque temps chez elle pour bien le former ;) (C'est juste une idée , un conseil fais surtout ce qui te plait !)
Author's Response:
Merci ! :D
Ce n'est pas impossible qu'à l'avenir nos deux dominatrices partagent séparément ce pauvre James ! :D
[Report This]Date: August 15 2016 2:08 PM Title: Yuna
I love this story. Sorry I can't offer any contructive criticism, I'm not too great at that haha but thanks for writing this and thanks for the mention. I'm glad my story inspired you.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for the review ! I'm happy it pleases you :)
Your story was awesome, included lots of themes I loved, themes you're finding back here haha !
[Report This]Date: August 12 2016 2:51 PM Title: Yuna
I can't say anything other than that I enjoy this story very much!
Tank you for writiing it!
Author's Response:
Thanks friend ! I'm doing my best, I'm glad people are enjoying it :)
Date: August 09 2016 12:20 PM Title: Yuna
The suspense may actually kill me. My ghost will blame you.
Author's Response:
Hopefully you'll survive for a few more days !
[Report This]Date: August 09 2016 9:24 AM Title: Yuna
I'm enjoying this story and hope you're able to keep it going. I'm more of a fan of violent or deadly progressions to these tales and hope he is taken too far by his friend and sister's feet when he's tiny. Maybe focus on how truly overwhelming and deadly the smell of their feet become to him.
Author's Response:
There will be no deaths in my stories, but be sure that James will have his share of overwhelming deadly smell of feet !
Thanks for the review !
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 8:28 PM Title: Yuna
another great chapter. Story is developing nicely. I personally would love as much feet, foot odor , sweaty feet as possible. Feet feet feet!
Author's Response:
Be careful what you wish for ;)
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 5:29 PM Title: Yuna
I'm not crazy over the foot stuff, but the rest is great! I really love how he searched all that and now his sister has the computer. Could be an excellent story, really interested to see where you take it!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
Unfortunately, there will be a lot of foot related stuff, I've started the story with that in mind :(
On the other hand, depending on where the story goes, we will see more than feet in the future. Feel free to share what you would like to see !
Date: August 08 2016 11:01 AM Title: Yuna
Excited to read more. Seems to be developing quite nicely.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm doing my best. Hope you'll like what's to come :)
[Report This]Date: August 07 2016 9:17 PM Title: Yuna
I also cannot wait to read more :)
Author's Response:
Thanks ! Next chapter should be up in the evening :)
[Report This]Date: August 07 2016 6:13 PM Title: Yuna
Excellent start! I like how both characters interact, and despite Yuna's domineering, she feels very sweet and almost loving. I can't wait to read more. And as far as your English is concerned, it's pretty good! I look forward to more of this story!
Author's Response:
Thanks, it means a lot !
Indeed, Yuna actually likes James - a lot -, and she's the kind of friend anyone would love to have ! (Despite her domineering side )
[Report This]Date: August 07 2016 2:54 PM Title: Yuna
The beginning is nice. I expect you'll build your characters first from what I saw in the first chapter. Your English's good no worries. Continue :)
Author's Response:
Thanks !
Yes, as you guessed, the action will not really start until I've managed to set the characters in. When I read a story, the first thing I want is for it to be plausible. (Not according to our standarts, but according to the story standarts.) Therefore, I'll do my best to make James's aventure something that could have happened to anyone, had they lived in his universe. Yet, do not worry, it should be getting interesting in a few chapters !