Date: July 22 2016 10:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
First chapter was alright but you've really made the story come into its own with the next few. Well done!
Author's Response:
Well, I'm glad you like it and that you see it improving :)
I'm curious about your perception. What was the difference that made you e joy the last chapters more than the initial one?
Also, being this story an experience and with you being such a good writer and advisor in these topics, I wanted to ask you for your feedback on the approach and tone of this story vs side effects.
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: July 19 2016 9:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love the story :) if you could work in some butt crush and maybe even a fart that would be amazing, but it's amazing nonetheless!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad to see that you are enjoying it. I think that you will enjoy the coming chapter.
I'm experimenting a little bit with this story, trying many new things at the same time (the approach is quite different than in my previous trilogy), so I wanted to check with you what you like the most/the least about it.
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: July 19 2016 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Still awesome :)
Author's Response:
Thanks! Hopefully the quotation marks have helped :P
[Report This]Date: July 17 2016 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
Ah, right, I forgot that this was more of an affectionate parody-type story (mostly because it works really well as a 'real' one). I suppose I should give you that last half-star, eh?
Author's Response:
I wasn't doing it for the half-star, but it's appreciated nonetheless :P
It's interesting to read that the story works well as real tone too... I think some of the coming chapters are going to be even cheesier, so maybe that aspect is lost. Just to let you know, I decided to reach a compromise by keeping the ALL CAPS, as in Eileen's story but bringing back the quotation marks starting in Chapter 2, so at least it will be more compliant from a grammar point of view.
One of the things I want to try with this story is to take suggestions from the readers on what Vicki should do in future chapters. Do you have any ideas?
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: July 16 2016 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good overall, but the all-caps, quotation-marks-lacking dialogue style for the giantess is really off-putting.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I know what you mean about the all-caps and the lack of quotation marks. I would not typically do that (in my previous stories I use quotation marks and not caps), but the story I was taking as a starting point was written like this,s o I decided to go ahead and use the same formatting as part of the "homage". As I mentioned, my intention for this story was to be less serious (more cheesy if you want), so I thought it would not be such a big deal, but I'm interested on getting people's opinions. Do you think the story would improve if I got rid of this?
Thanks!