You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: redeyes98 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 02 2018 1:12 PM Title: A Dream?

great chapter. i hope this isnt dead?

Reviewer: myy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 01 2017 8:59 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!


through oakley sunglasses some heart. Some philipp plein clothes words katespade outlet can jordan release dates not say hermes bags silence, memphis grizzlies more suitable for keeping fake rolex everything; longchamp outlet some timberland boots injuries, louboutin shoes can designer handbags not ed hardy clothing be louboutin put new balance store down softball bats without covering, portland trail blazers silent forget nfl eagles wiser.Care stone island store more barbour mens jackets what, ralph lauren uk how swarovski many versace shoes outlet people north face will pandora jewellery stay polo ralph in timberland outlet your cheap true religion heart; and givenchy bags outlet how mcm bags to nfl saints fit michael kors outlet online sale a shoes on sale lot cheap jerseys of coach factory outlet online feelings chicago bulls can not coach outlet online help barbour women jackets you to flat iron choose. reebok Distance burberry outlet online is nike huarache not clothing websites terrible, kate spade terrible instyler ionic styler is ralph lauren the nfl bengals heart michael kors purses farther coach factory outlet online and vibram shoes farther; recalls ralph lauren online inevitable, ecco women shoes sadly, it ray ban sunglasses outlet has become michael kors purses accustomed. plein outlet Those nike mercurial scars washington wizards left behind, oakley sunglasses cheap make dallas mavericks jersey your nike outlet heart nfl dolphins ache when, nfl texans just when nfl steelers the replica rolex pain! michael kors outlet online Know lunette oakley pas cher how to mont blanc pens unload, cheap nike shoes to polo ralph lauren outlet online heart a nike air max space polo ralph lauren outlet to have swarovski australia a iphone 4s cases dignity. nike huaraches Society rayban Huixiu burberry bags outlet calm, michael kors warm smile mbt shoes outlet no kobe bryant jersey mourning.Between people, can ray ban sunglasses you prada handbags cheat pandora bracelets a nfl chargers little pistons jersey less, celine handbags a the north face little woolrich outlet online more burberry online shop sincere; converse between nfl 49ers the birkenstock outlet heart and beats by dre the heart, armani clothing can you denver nuggets be ralph lauren outlet more longchamp outlet honest, los angeles clippers less camouflage. oakley outlet online A heart, toronto raptors how roche run to barbour mens jackets bear air max shoes how tommy hilfiger outlet stores much damage pandora rings before baseball bats it nfl buccaneers can really polo ralph lauren grow? This coach purses world, burberry outlet online who have prada ups nike roshe and downs, ralph lauren outlet online you are michael kors canada not the exception; nike max who has babyliss a bottega veneta regret, nike free shoes frustration new balance is ray ban sunglasses not cheap eyeglasses alone. Not nfl jerseys all nfl panthers smiles prada outlet are hollister sincere, indiana pacers but abercrombie not all are nfl azcardinals easy wholesale handbags to polo ralph lauren adhere cheap oakley sunglasses to.You nike online have chrome hearts jewelry your hardships, louboutins I dsquared2 jeans have ferragamo shoes my christian louboutin shoes pain. puma Not understand, ralph lauren tracksuits with chi hair happiness, jimmy choo life should prada sunglasses be exudes rayban sunglasses brilliance.Life tommy hilfiger as coach outlet it air max 2014 should be, orlando magic comes louboutin outlet shining michael kors bags through, very salvatore ferragamo funny cheap jerseys whenever nfl jaguars an burberry handbags encouraging nfl chiefs look, barbour outlet just a nfl ravens slight reebok shoes smile, shop coach factory as nfl packers long cheap true religion as burberry outlet a burberry handbags big louboutin warm north face outlet hands, just jordans for sale gently the north face patting marc jacobs handbags your ralph lauren shoulder, coach factory outlet online it nfl bills will hilfiger outlet bring coach outlet you not nfl giants the asics same ray ban sunglasses feeling, cleveland cavaliers jerseys not nfl browns the coach black friday same confidence, utah jazz the lacoste polos taste skechers of nike air force life, levis outlet store counting ray ban life.Life air jordans has brought replica handbags me, polo ralph lauren outlet change my burberry uk life.Living fred perry shoes life, cheap oakley sunglasses everyone converse chucks has dsquared2 shoes his hilfiger own converse outlet karma, michael kors everyone nfl jets has michael kors outlet his cheap michael kors own opportunity, some skechers people's dre beats life michael kors v?skor easy, longchamp taschen some people nike air a longchamp lifetime air jordan shoes of michael kors outlet online ups nike free 5.0 and bottega downs, michael kors handbags some people's life exciting marc jacobs outlet and mia jersey ordinary. adidas No matter salvatore ferragamo what bcbg dresses situation nfl bears in adidas neo life, cheap jerseys do hermes birkin not complain, gsw jerseys do soccer shoes not juicy couture give air max up, swarovski jewelry not nike air max 2014 jealous kate spade outlet of others. Own baseball jerseys their nike air force own oakley sunglasses convinced, is a triumph ray ban of reason; north face backpacks own scarpe hogan their replica watches own suns jerseys touched, oakley black friday is rolex a north face jackets kind valentino shoes outlet of cheap ray ban spiritual swarovski sublimation; nike outlet store own nfl vikings their adidas sneakers own ray ban outlet conquest, nike air max 2015 it thomas sabo is nfl seahawks a mcm backpack outlet way roshes of cheap oakley life iphone 5 cases mature. ray ban black friday Own their uhren own hermes outlet beyond, ray ban zonnebril it longchamp is air jordan retro a roshe run developmental tommy hilfiger maturity. giuseppe shoes Own asics gel their replica watches own true religion jeans outlet liberation, coach factory outlet online and ralph lauren a ray ban outlet tangle cheap oakley sunglasses of fidget spinner his vans outlet mind.People in nfl patriots this kevin durant shoeskobe bryant shoes life, mcm handbags is pandora nothing nike air max more pandora than cheap basketball shoes a process barbour women jackets of philadelphia 76ers jersey inter-glory jerseys from china flower nike tn requin dew, omega watches frost jimmy choo shoes on cheap oakley grass burberry rich; houston rockets life, ralph lauren polo no salomon schuhe vows, adidas shoes truly like; longchamp handbags do new balance shoes not timberland shoes need michael kors to blame coach bags each other, understand michael kors bags each other bos jersey just fine, jordan shoes no birkenstock taschen outlet mutual replica watches suspicion, nfl rams I believe polo outlet online the zapatillas nike other side good; burberry sale you nike air do not sac jerseys need hollister clothing store to be nba jerseys angry designer handbags all nop jerseys day, know how nike outlet tolerant enough; do pandora not always converse shoes leave, san antonio spurs like nike free run you true religion outlet have coach outlet in ray bans mind; no nfl broncos sensation, oakley sunglasses outlet like cheap jerseys go longchamp black friday to oakley the mcm outlet end; michael kors purses no jerseys from china rhetoric, coach factory online real long champ good!Life, north face pas cher is ralph lauren outlet not air jordan lonely, the north face just hollister do nike mercurial vapor not puma outlet store want coach outlet to tory burch shoes say. kanye west shoes Some hogan feelings dansko shoes in the ferragamo outlet difficult michael kors bags to milwaukee bucks find, nike outlet and getting michael kors outlet online sale no relojes especiales confidence; giuseppe zanotti some fitflop thoughts, in unspeakable, true religion gradually cheap michael kors became new balance a huaraches story. There true religion jeans women are always fendi outlet online some rayban dialogue, hugo boss outlet so burberry handbags you suddenly burberry outlet online hurt coach outlet sale heart; supra shoes there ray ban sbocco are womens hoodies always timberland homme some gafas oakley moments, michael kors handbags so nike roshe you ray ban wayfarer suddenly die of heart; polo ralph lauren there burberry are air max 95 always some jerseys from china things rolex replica that supra footwear make prada outlet you roshe run inadvertently, nets jersey you minnesota timberwolves see some adidas superstar people, nba jerseys see oakley prescription just charlotte hornets jersey to attend; nfl redskins not hollister online shop deutschland silent, ua stephen curry accustomed oakley to new balance hide soccer outlet online fragile free running hearts. free run How juicy couture clothings much lunette ray ban pas cher coveted birkenstock taschen deutschland final demand nba jerseys and nfl cowboys not, fred perry how many swarovski crystal homes ralph lauren factory store can bcbg max azria not refuse skechers womens shoes to swarovski let ralph lauren shirts go ralph lauren last. air max Alive ferragamo is hollister kids not oakley sunglasses outlet easy, air max 90 you occhiali oakley must michael kors go through christian louboutin in russell westbrook jersey order nike air max to nike air max understand; nfl lions happiness oakley outlet is oakley very beats by dre simple, nfl colts only simple to mcm bags be knicks jerseys happy.Feelings, calvin klein no michael kors outlet online please, leave ray ban sunglasses only c&c beanies wholesale the mizuno running shoes sincere; red bottoms people, vans shoes no watches trampling, coach factory outlet online accompanied versace outlet only nfl raiders dependent warmth. A northface situation, cheap glasses began nike store in nike free shoes the hogan shoes outlet heart, vans schuhe but also nfl falcons silent the north face outlet joy; montre pas cher a love ralph lauren uk beyond coach outlet the cold heart, adidas shoes outlet silent and tommy hilfiger online shop more. michael kors bags Love tory burch sale can beats audio watch michael kors bags but michael kors australia do nfl titans not hollister co expect, the

thomas sabo uk


Reviewer: newb Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22 2016 2:59 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!

Hey man! Hope the next chapter is coming along! Can't wait!! :)

Reviewer: Rianbas Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2016 9:54 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!

Hey all!

Quick update, I kust finished my finals today. So Im just working ahead right now. Im sorry this is taking long, I don't like to let things stay idle like this. Again, Im really sorry this has been delayed for two weeks (I think now?) 

Thanks for understanding, Have a Great day!

Reviewer: newb Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 03 2016 11:34 AM Title: Meet Your Characters!

Can't wait for the next addition!

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01 2016 1:29 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!

Having now read up-to-date, I continue to enjoy your story. I have the same comments as before, but don't let it bother you too much. I spent many years as a technical writer, and such things catch my attention quickly. But I can still enjoy a story that is well thought out. It might be a little difficult for me to sync with young people and their ways of thinking now, but I try.

Re' your auto correct: Don't let it correct your spelling, itself. Use it to give you options, but make your own choices.

Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 01 2016 12:52 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!

You've got a good story here, but if you want to be taken seriously as a writer, you should make an effort to improve your punctuation, and use of capitals, among other things. You have the talent, but for some of us, these things detract from the story, especially if we have to reread it to make sense of what you are saying. But keep up the effort, because your talent will keep you in the running!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01 2016 12:35 PM Title: A Nice Day

What!!! Adopted brother and sister! You know, that makes sense, becuase Marissa acted like a friend instead of a sister.

Now when James shrinks, I won't feel that bad when Marissa has her way with him.

James shrinks next chapter! Oh boy, I can't wait!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2016 7:31 PM Title: Moving Along

I get nervous when I hear girls giggling and looking my way. (However, usually it's a good sign that they are looking at me.)

I bet he is about to shrink. Or they are going to toy with him.

Good chapter, I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response:

... Maybe?

And when girls giggle at me, I get nervous. i check myself over to see if something isnt wrong lol.

Thanks for reviewing, have a Great Day!


Reviewer: romaescipion Signed [Report This]
Date: April 29 2016 5:18 AM Title: Meet Your Characters!

Me ha PARECIDO Una historia genial, estoy Deseando leer el proximo capitulo, mi anhelo seria Que la Chica Que this enamorada de James BBW mar, un saludo

y animo!!!

Author's Response: Yo no hablo español muy bien. Pero pongo esto en un traductor, y si creo que lo que está diciendo salió como lo hizo en el traductor , ninguna de las chicas en este partido en realidad como James , es una estratagema broma de que James vengan a la fiesta. Lo siento. También me siento si esto se ve como basura en español . De todos modos , espero que disfrutar de la historia, y tienen un gran día

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 6:01 PM Title: Meet Your Characters!

First of all, glad you are back on writing a new story!

Second, I'm amazed at how real these characters are. The emotions, the friends, the way each character comforts another, it's beautiful.

Interesting approach on making 2 protagonists. I'm guessing it's Alexa and James?

Hmm. A freshman 15 years old and a senior at 17 years old? Something seems off. Did Marrisa skip a grade or did James fall back? (I'm not sure if this was a mistake or you purposely did this. If it was your idea, then bravo.)

Man, I wish report cards were always given that fast. That way I don't have to dread waiting for that.

Very good thinking on making Marrissa have a car and James take a bus. It took me a second to realize that James is too young to drive yet.

I like the Ant-Man reference. I suspect what is coming soon. He said he even desires that job. Boy, will be get it.

In your last big paragraph, you said "everything likes to laugh at....". I think you meant "everyone". (I always hate when auto correct gets me like that.)

Yes, thank you! No giant men or shrinking women. High five on that. I like the shrinking guy being at the mercy of giant girls (or women). I also like it when the girls have unique personalities and it will help me decide who is my favorite giantess.

Fantastic start! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Im going to answer your questions in order. Every point I say is responding to your points

Yeah man. Thanks!

I mean, I didn't think my characterization was all that great. But Hey, thanks. much appreciated.

Maybe... I mean James is probaly going to be. But who else? Only time will tell, maybe you havent even meet the second protagonist. I also use that term loosely. Our Main Characters are James and someone else.

Those ages are a bit strange. I was 15 at the end of my Freshmen Year, and turned 18 at the End of Senior Year. So These ages are accurate(ish). 

No way! I hate how quick they come in already!

Marissa is a smart girl, and very hard working. Probaly passed on her first try.

I couldn't not with the Ant-Man. I read Irredemable Ant-Man the other day, which is what inspired me to do this. (I wont be taking more than a handful of ideas from it. Its great if you haven't read it by the way. I reccomend it) Also... Maybe he will... Maybe he wont...

Yeah. Damn You Machines trying to outhink me!

Its a point I have a prefferenc for. And Just you wait. I havent made up a place for Marissa to go, but it will be a decent sized school. AT least 10,000. 

Neither can I.

Hope you liked it, Hope I answered everything and gave you some interesting feedback. Have a great Day!


You must login (register) to review.